#1July 24th, 2006 · 10:45 AM
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Charlatans' Lottery
this is for those who trust something/someone that they know to be useless, but they don't have any other choice except to just keep marching on through life, taking a beating until it all gets better.  And why do they do it?  because they've got no other options...

Charlatans' Lottery

(verse)
The tragedy, the hopes, the fears
The tears that you cry--
My love's for you, Worthless Charm
Superstition's led me on,
to think it's my fault
We can't explain it
We're better off smiling stupidly,
All the way
There's no cure, so don't try one
Don't try it out
There'll be no return

(bridge)
Lovely poison,
I'd throw you out the window
And if it weren't for the fact that you are my Life,
I would, I would
Breaking heart,
I'd settle for a second's peace
And if you'd have seen me a week ago, you'd have said,
"Hey, chin up."
But what's more?--I slipped
Rapidly I tumble,
Defeated by my chance in life, I-- I--
I'm ready to fall now

(chorus)
Here's your chance to scream out loud
Here's your time to live this down
Just wait, It gets good
We're thrust down so we can have someone pick us up
When it matters to us the most
And the tears that you cry--
Just know--
My love's for you, Worthless Charm

(verse)
Everything that I say goes unheard
And the things I've learned, they add up still
To far less to ever make the difference I'm looking for

(chorus)
Here's your chance to scream out loud
Here's your time to live this down
Just wait, It gets good
We're thrust down so we can have someone pick us up
When it matters to us the most
And the tears that you cry--
Just know--
My love's for you, Worthless Charm

(outro)
Send us home with no regrets,
We wanted solace, but we found locked doors
Send us home, its getting cold out here
Talents fail me when they need me the most
#2July 30th, 2006 · 05:09 PM
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I really like it.  I wish I had more of an idea of a meter or beat that this would go to, however I do have a suggestion.  For some reason the 3rd stanza starting with "Lovely poison" is bothering me.  Maybe its the fact that I don't feel the imagery in throwing it out the window relating to ridding yourself of its evils.  Everything else seems very well thought out and encompassing, but that line, specifically "I'd throw you out the window" just really bothers me.  I think if you could find a replacement for that line it may bring more meaning to that stanza...  But then again, its not my lyric

MaHaGoN
#3August 1st, 2006 · 02:36 PM
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thanks for the reply--

i'm working on clarifying the lyrics right now actually..  the song is supposed to be about wishing you could change the horribly frustrating luck you experience in life and wanting to get rid of it.  but, the problem comes when you can't ACTUALY just throw your life out the window.  that's the lovely poison.  it feels like you're dying, yet you wouldn't bring yourself to just dispose of it.  now, the real question is whether or not life is a poison that kills you, or if you'd die without it...  those options seem very similar, but life is either the source of death, or it's saving you from death as long as it can.

besides, i'm not the type to write about killing yourself or doing any sort of drugs, like an actual poison

thanks again for the comment.
#4August 3rd, 2006 · 02:27 PM
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this song seems honest, uses simple language, and you seem upbeat despite a situation that obviously bothers you... it's hard to point out what I like about the lyrics, but I like them
#5November 28th, 2006 · 11:58 PM
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ooooohhhhh....
I really like this. Very poetic. I first thought that the "out the window" line bothered me, but after I read it though a couple more times and the context became more clear, I liked it. My only problem is that I am confused by the changes from 1st to 2nd POV and back, particularly in V2. Are all the 2nd POV lines directed at the same "poison"? Or is some if it directed at the "general you"?
#6October 13th, 2007 · 08:32 PM
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I updated these lyrics-- I remade the melody and everything a few months ago, but I'm not done with the music...

tell me what you think of it now, as a finished thing.
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