#1August 2nd, 2009 · 02:59 PM
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United States of America
Rebirth (dance the way)
(this song is a waltz-ish type tempo (3/4) and is sort of swaying back and forth)

She took a dive six feet under
into the box she went
I have tried to kill the girl I was before
her time on earth was
being uselessly spent
Damn the expectations
I never met
She dances with dawn
I awake with the sunset


(Pre-chorus and Chorus are the only harder played parts in the song)

Pre-Chorus:
Welcome the darkness, where shadows do fall
Endless nights of reliving it all
But when the dawn breaks I shall sleep and dream
of all things not said and all things unseen


Chorus:
You're dead to me
Your time is done
You had your chance
Now this rebirth has begun
I pray that you sleep well
and you see the gates of a far away heaven
not the nearby gates of hell


Though I wish I were her
never doing any wrong
and the days lasting twice as long
But the night returns and calls yet again
awaiting for my rebirth to begin

:Pre-Chorus:
:Chorus:


(this verse is louder than the 1st and 2nd verses but not harder played)

Oh' I wish I could dance the way
The girl in my dreams dances in the day
please make this night end
I do not wish to be reborn again

Oh' I wish I could dance the way
The girl in my dreams dances in the day
please make this night end

I do not wish to be reborn again (hold------) music fades out


  • Its rough I'm still putting it together in some parts. I already have some music to it but if someone wanted to try it out I wouldn't complain, ideas are always welcome!) let me know what you think!

-Sarah White
#2August 2nd, 2009 · 04:47 PM
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It just so happens I've been working on a 3/4 time compoistion, it has a bluesy/Jazzy sad feel to it, I'll see if it fits.

Nice song BTW

Great to see you writing again  
#3August 10th, 2009 · 11:57 PM
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165 posts
United States of America
Thanks!

It was a combination of no sleep, a ton of dr.pepper and pure boredom that gave birth to this song.
Sweet! Let me know if it fits!


 
Sarah White
#4September 9th, 2009 · 10:06 AM
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165 posts
United States of America
Thank you! In that case I shall very much enjoy bugging the crap outta you!
Getting ready to put another up so stop in and check it out!!

Thanks for the love!
-Sarah
#5October 29th, 2009 · 09:47 AM
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463 posts
Nepal
Ok I rarely comment on lyrics as I'm not very good at it but here's my thoughts on this one

There's some great things in this song I love the opening two lines
The words really ring well together during the all songs but I get lost a bit in the meaning(story) of it as a all
Maybe it's just me being a bit thick though so don't take too much notice of it
#6October 29th, 2009 · 01:24 PM
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165 posts
United States of America
Well thank you very much first off for taking time to read my lyrics.

 I love the opening lines too. They are the ones that founded the rest of the song.
The story is about a girl that has had countless disapointment in trying to be good, trying to be the girl that everyone thought that she was and the one that they want her to be, and so she is "burying" that girl six feet under, she is just through with that person. But even as she has turned into this evil night living monster so to speak, she still dreams of the girl that she wants to be, not the one that other people painted her as, but the girl she was all along.

Hope that helps

thanks again.
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