Well here it is! the lucky number thirteen! My bakers dozen. Don't be too mad if i ruined peoples happy go lucky view on love but its true... at least i think it is. As for the song. I don't know what inspired it. I came up with it today at work :p it seems I do that a lot. So well as usual. if you read, please tell me what you think. Thanks for your time. Have a fairytale filled day.

Love's not a Fairytale
Copyright Colin Hickel, 2009. 6. 16

This world has taught us that love is like a fairytale
We find the one we want and its like finding the holy grail
But we all know that view on love is a lie
So stop your wining and wondering why

It's not a fairytale
Not how this story could be
It's just a wish upon a star
Wishing that you were next to me
It's not a fairytale
It's just a game of make believe
We're like Romeo and Juliet
We're dying in the very end

We're trained to think a wedding cake is the key
That it solves all our problems, just look and see
But that sharp black suit and that fluffy dress
Seem to never last forever even if we give our best
And the one thing I've learned from my many tries
Is that no matter what they tell you, wedding cake is a lie

It's not a fairytale
Not how this story could be
It's just a wish upon a star
Wishing that you were next to me
It's not a fairytale
It's just a game of make believe
We're like Romeo and Juliet
We're dying in the very end

I know this is bad news and I'm sorry to bare it
But you needed the truth before the lies got to wear it
And now that that's done, you can let out a sigh
But get up off your ass and give real love a try

It's not a fairytale
Not how this story could be
It's just a wish upon a star
Wishing that you were next to me
It's not a fairytale
It's just a game of make believe
We're like Romeo and Juliet
We're dying in the very end
It's not a fairytale
Not how this story could be
It's just a wish upon a star
Wishing that you were next to me

Wow... cool song. I like the audacity and the honesty of this song. It's really good, although I don't agree in all but... it's what you feel. At first using the fairytale as a metaphor kind of confuse me but as I read on, it made sense. I think you did a good job!

Thanks a lot RCS. and well its kinda true the whole fairytale thing. i mean just look at all the movies that are out :p Now yeah it is my opinion so there will be conflicts but hey, i'm cool with that. Thanks again for your awesome input.

Funny!
I like this .. "I know this is bad news and I'm sorry to bare it
But you needed the truth before the lies got to wear it"

I dont like : We're dying in the very end, could it not be something like "Dying to make it be" ? .or "Dying to see you in me" or something.

I like the choruses, they work well, I'm not so into the second verse it's like you become all 'matter of fact' and forget your writing poetry or a song.

I like the idea, but I find the idea of seeing the curtains being drawn back even more exciting ! 

yeah i didn't like that part either. i just had issues coming up with something better. I like your "Dying to make it be" though, if you don't mind, I think i'm gonna use it thanks a lot for the input. it was very helpful

its good MB, it is.
for some reason though i dont think i like it as much as your other stuff.

it really does tell the truth though, ya know?
like, love doesnt happen the way they potray it in the movies.
its no fairy tale

good job

maybe...you could try recording this one instead hahaha

it is an AWESOME song. i just read it i hope i can hear it sometime soon

"But that sharp black suit and that fluffy dress
 Seem to never last forever even if we give our best
 And the one thing I've learned from my many tries
 Is that no matter what they tell you, wedding cake is a lie"

Something about these words here.... they seem to tstick out to me a bit...
i would try using the same idea.. but change up the words maybe some thing
more along the lines of

   "But that sharp black suit and that fluffy dress
    Can't be the key to our happiness
    When you wake up ten years down the road
     You slept by your prince, but now he's the toad"

haha ok maybe not... but try some lyricisms...
I find they are very helpfull expectialy in your situation with this song
your trying to be very.. brutally honest with your lyrics...
lighten them up with a little satire..

"But that sharp black suit and that fluffy dress
 Seem to never last forever even if we give our best
 And the one thing I've learned from my many tries
 Is that no matter what they tell you, wedding cake is a lie"

I liked this verse. Especially the second line.
"Seem to never last forever" causes a kind of rhyme inside a rhyme. Which is something I enjoy playing with. Mixes it up a bit. Though I would advise changing it to "Seem to never last forever though we give our best" But to be honest, if you haven't already got a melody for this you'll undoubtedly change them around a bit anyway.
The last line is good but sounds a little awkward. Maybe it's just cause my mate showed me this game called Portal the other day and then I saw a guy in a T-shirt saying "The cake is a lie" and it just reminded me of that.
I think stealing Kings line is a good idea to replace "dying in the end". That line almost pushes the lyrics towards floppy fringes and red and black clothing.
But yeah, I really liked these lyrics.
I also agree with your opinion on peoples misconception of love.
You going to record?