just came out with this song while wondering where fate takes us
.. my first composed and recorded
constructive criticism is welcome

Lyrics
some are born with a silver spoon
some are born in rags
do you know what it takes
to reverse the sting of fate

the wheelbarrow of time
sharpens some, dulls some

some yield the sword of toil
rest cleave with the sapient foil
abject ones delve into suspension
and are left to gape at the stars

the wheelbarrow of time
sharpens some, dulls some

The dark arrow of destiny
takes a few to the seventh heaven
It's the same arrow that
takes the others to excruciation

the wheelbarrow of time
sharpens some, dulls some

do all these things matter
when fate makes its final strike
blessed ones wander in the elysian fields
the rest endure their life in hades

the wheelbarrow of time
sharpens some, dulls some

Well I guess it would sound gud if u some dark bassy notes. Personally I feel it lacks bite. It sort of sounds corny in places, sorry