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#1March 29th, 2009 · 12:02 AM
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The Angel's Lullaby (vrsn 1.0)
Her angel lips sing lovely lies
through scarlet stained lullabies
listening to her, our heart beats are still
she's a flightless bird who lives a thrill
in the morning light she sings her song
for others to awake and sing along

She can wear her mask
hide her pain in a disguise
but through this angel's lovely lies
she cant mask the pain inside her eyes


she sings this song without a care
her melodic lies filling the air
she lives for this moment everyday
she lives because its the only way

she sings a song to get through the day
she sings aloud then cries away
off to sleep, drift in dreams
without knowing what tomorrow brings

*chorus*

sing to live, sing to die
sing aloud to tell your lies
sing to feel sing to hear
sing to maybe calm your fears
sing not only when you cry
this the angels lullaby


~~~~~ This is a collab between Myself and DowntownSasquatch~~~~~~~
We both took part in these lyrics. This is the first version of this song.
 Alot of inspiration for this song, great story (true story), ask Sasquatch.

So here it is, our first musical collaboration baby lol

Let us know what you think!


Sarah White 
#2March 29th, 2009 · 09:18 AM
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I think....I think....I think, wow, very nice piece.
You definitely found inspiration in coffee chocolates and window sill.
This reads so beautifully .... the italic chorus doesn't read as well as the rest...or should I say it doesn't read as strong compared to the rest, which is very strong.
You have some beautiful lines making beautiful weaves creating beautiful imagery, and I feel that somehow the chorus either needs to be simpler or stronger, as it is it's not catchy enough, the rest of the song is catchier !
But very very good it is just the same......you two might have hit on something....this is ..... mature and very intelligent, am I right in thinking Denis is working on some music? I hope so , his music is also mature and intelligent! 
#3March 29th, 2009 · 11:06 AM
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kings wrote…
I think....I think....I think, wow, very nice piece.
You definitely found inspiration in coffee chocolates and window sill.
This reads so beautifully .... the italic chorus doesn't read as well as the rest...or should I say it doesn't read as strong compared to the rest, which is very strong.
You have some beautiful lines making beautiful weaves creating beautiful imagery, and I feel that somehow the chorus either needs to be simpler or stronger, as it is it's not catchy enough, the rest of the song is catchier !
But very very good it is just the same......you two might have hit on something....this is ..... mature and very intelligent, am I right in thinking Denis is working on some music? I hope so , his music is also mature and intelligent!  :D

Well thanks for mentioning me Kings. Yes Sarah is working on a song, I've uploaded two songs recently with Sarah's lyrics.

Sarah well done for getting back in the swing of things I'm not a good critique for lyrics like good 'old' [pun intended] Kings, whom I respect a lot. So I would take his suggestion full on.

Way to go Sarah!!!!

Denis
#4March 29th, 2009 · 08:15 PM
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[quote=Denis]
kings wrote…
Way to go Sarah!!!!

~Denis

   do i not get credit to...
#5March 29th, 2009 · 09:36 PM
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AWWWWWW
POOR SASQUATCH!!!!! GUYS HE WROTE PART OF IT!!!!!!!

but thank you none the less, it is a powerful song, Sasquatch and I are very proud. lol
#6March 30th, 2009 · 02:14 PM
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[quote=DowntownSasquatch]
Denis wrote…
kings wrote…
Way to go Sarah!!!!

~Denis

   do i not get credit to...

Well said.

Apologise Saquatch, blame Kings..LOL [only kidding Kings]
Well done to both of you.

Keep 'em comin'

Denis
#7March 30th, 2009 · 07:02 PM
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yes... MissWhite and i are very proud of our

prvoerbial collaboratory muse child...
#8March 31st, 2009 · 05:24 PM
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hey guys... any ideas on the chorus???!!!???!!!
#9March 31st, 2009 · 08:23 PM
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looks like your there you just need to adjust it a bit. try swapping and makin the chorus lines shorter.

excellent lyrics .
#10April 1st, 2009 · 07:03 PM
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NEW CHORUS?
what about this as the chorus?
I can come up with a new break easy...
what'd ya think.... Sarah?

sing to live, sing to die
sing aloud to tell your lies
sing not only when you cry
this the angels lullaby
#11April 2nd, 2009 · 09:48 AM
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Hmm
Well Sas that could work. Actually i kinda like it.

i can digg it.
#12April 2nd, 2009 · 06:59 PM
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but will the well we digg be dry?   
#13April 3rd, 2009 · 09:47 AM
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ohh
no it will not be dry. What would be the point in digging it if it would just be dry in the end??
#14April 8th, 2009 · 12:18 PM
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Nice words Sarah and Squatch! I will be searching for your other works. Cant wait to hear your voice.
#15May 10th, 2009 · 01:51 AM
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Once again, Nice lyrics. I like the tone of the lyrics you keep making. Like....They're powerful....But not too powerful...If that made any sense. Anyways.. good job to the both of you. Hope it gets made into a great song.
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