| The Angel's Lullaby (vrsn 1.0) |
Her angel lips sing lovely lies
through scarlet stained lullabies
listening to her, our heart beats are still
she's a flightless bird who lives a thrill
in the morning light she sings her song
for others to awake and sing along
She can wear her mask
hide her pain in a disguise
but through this angel's lovely lies
she cant mask the pain inside her eyes
she sings this song without a care
her melodic lies filling the air
she lives for this moment everyday
she lives because its the only way
she sings a song to get through the day
she sings aloud then cries away
off to sleep, drift in dreams
without knowing what tomorrow brings
*chorus*
sing to live, sing to die
sing aloud to tell your lies
sing to feel sing to hear
sing to maybe calm your fears
sing not only when you cry
this the angels lullaby
~~~~~ This is a collab between Myself and DowntownSasquatch~~~~~~~
We both took part in these lyrics. This is the first version of this song.
Alot of inspiration for this song, great story (true story), ask Sasquatch.
So here it is, our first musical collaboration baby lol
Let us know what you think!
Sarah White
through scarlet stained lullabies
listening to her, our heart beats are still
she's a flightless bird who lives a thrill
in the morning light she sings her song
for others to awake and sing along
She can wear her mask
hide her pain in a disguise
but through this angel's lovely lies
she cant mask the pain inside her eyes
she sings this song without a care
her melodic lies filling the air
she lives for this moment everyday
she lives because its the only way
she sings a song to get through the day
she sings aloud then cries away
off to sleep, drift in dreams
without knowing what tomorrow brings
*chorus*
sing to live, sing to die
sing aloud to tell your lies
sing to feel sing to hear
sing to maybe calm your fears
sing not only when you cry
this the angels lullaby
~~~~~ This is a collab between Myself and DowntownSasquatch~~~~~~~
We both took part in these lyrics. This is the first version of this song.
Alot of inspiration for this song, great story (true story), ask Sasquatch.
So here it is, our first musical collaboration baby lol
Let us know what you think!
Sarah White
I think....I think....I think, wow, very nice piece.
You definitely found inspiration in coffee chocolates and window sill.
This reads so beautifully .... the italic chorus doesn't read as well as the rest...or should I say it doesn't read as strong compared to the rest, which is very strong.
You have some beautiful lines making beautiful weaves creating beautiful imagery, and I feel that somehow the chorus either needs to be simpler or stronger, as it is it's not catchy enough, the rest of the song is catchier !
But very very good it is just the same......you two might have hit on something....this is ..... mature and very intelligent, am I right in thinking Denis is working on some music? I hope so , his music is also mature and intelligent!
You definitely found inspiration in coffee chocolates and window sill.
This reads so beautifully .... the italic chorus doesn't read as well as the rest...or should I say it doesn't read as strong compared to the rest, which is very strong.
You have some beautiful lines making beautiful weaves creating beautiful imagery, and I feel that somehow the chorus either needs to be simpler or stronger, as it is it's not catchy enough, the rest of the song is catchier !
But very very good it is just the same......you two might have hit on something....this is ..... mature and very intelligent, am I right in thinking Denis is working on some music? I hope so , his music is also mature and intelligent!
kings wrote…
I think....I think....I think, wow, very nice piece.
You definitely found inspiration in coffee chocolates and window sill.
This reads so beautifully .... the italic chorus doesn't read as well as the rest...or should I say it doesn't read as strong compared to the rest, which is very strong.
You have some beautiful lines making beautiful weaves creating beautiful imagery, and I feel that somehow the chorus either needs to be simpler or stronger, as it is it's not catchy enough, the rest of the song is catchier !
But very very good it is just the same......you two might have hit on something....this is ..... mature and very intelligent, am I right in thinking Denis is working on some music? I hope so , his music is also mature and intelligent! :D
Well thanks for mentioning me Kings. Yes Sarah is working on a song, I've uploaded two songs recently with Sarah's lyrics.
Sarah well done for getting back in the swing of things I'm not a good critique for lyrics like good 'old' [pun intended] Kings, whom I respect a lot. So I would take his suggestion full on.
Way to go Sarah!!!!
Denis
do i not get credit to...[quote=DowntownSasquatch]
Well said.
Apologise Saquatch, blame Kings..LOL [only kidding Kings]
Well done to both of you.
Keep 'em comin'
Denis
Well said.
Apologise Saquatch, blame Kings..LOL [only kidding Kings]
Well done to both of you.
Keep 'em comin'
Denis
yes... MissWhite and i are very proud of our
prvoerbial collaboratory muse child...
prvoerbial collaboratory muse child...
hey guys... any ideas on the chorus???!!!???!!!
looks like your there you just need to adjust it a bit. try swapping and makin the chorus lines shorter.
excellent lyrics .
excellent lyrics .
| NEW CHORUS? |
what about this as the chorus?
I can come up with a new break easy...
what'd ya think.... Sarah?
sing to live, sing to die
sing aloud to tell your lies
sing not only when you cry
this the angels lullaby
I can come up with a new break easy...
what'd ya think.... Sarah?
sing to live, sing to die
sing aloud to tell your lies
sing not only when you cry
this the angels lullaby
but will the well we digg be dry? 
Once again, Nice lyrics. I like the tone of the lyrics you keep making. Like....They're powerful....But not too powerful...If that made any sense. Anyways.. good job to the both of you. Hope it gets made into a great song.
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