#1January 23rd, 2009 · 08:30 AM
22 threads / 7 songs
164 posts
Canada
first one.....go easy....:O)
well.....i've struggled forever to try to write lyrics.  that's why i do instrumentals.....it's easier!
so....i had got off the phone with a friend of mine, who's going through a nasty breakup & i also shop at second hand stores.  the two ideas just melded together.

& i've recently started singing...so....ya can't sing if ya don't have lyrics!

Landfill

Think I'll buy me something shiny
something silver, something old
someone else's treasure
something, someone used to hold

i'll bet it ended in the trash
part of someone else's life
a careless lover threw away
without thinking on it twice


chorus:

i thought of you a hundred times, then a hundred more
you discarded all my treasures



think i'll get me something plastic
cause i admire how it lasts
it clutters up the landfill
a throwaway outcast

indulgences of short term needs
used & then tossed out
without so much as a passing thought
or any sign of doubt


i thought of you a hundred times, then a hundred more
you discarded all my treasures
my
love was nothing more
love was nothing more


think i'll watch my favourite movie
it only comes in black & white
& if my luck is with me
i'll have company tonight


back to second chorus

end with pretty picking....a flute would be nice (denis?   )  or cello.

so there ya go.
#2January 23rd, 2009 · 11:41 AM
118 threads / 55 songs
3,086 posts
Netherlands
Hey, nice lyrics, I like em a lot! The verses come off more as poetry (of the type that can be used as lyrics) where the choruses show that these are indeed first and above all, song lyrics.

I'm sure you can make an excellent tune with these (even more so if you can trick Denis into collab )

Looking forward to the pretty picking already - cheers!
#3January 24th, 2009 · 06:00 AM
371 threads / 187 songs
3,384 posts
United Kingdom
Hmmm interesting post.

I was thinking what goals or plans I should put together for this year, one of the ideas was to go on the BandAMP forums and write songs to one of many lyrics posted. It seems so obvious now.

For those who don't know me. I seldom write lyrics, just can't get my head around it, I wouldn't want to write any old rubbish, if you know what I mean.

I would be more than happy to add flute, picking etc to the song

Denis
#4January 24th, 2009 · 04:11 PM
42 posts
United States of America
this is a good song.great job on meshing the two ideas together..
#5January 30th, 2009 · 05:17 PM
340 threads / 59 songs
4,344 posts
United Kingdom
Really really beautiful
I love it when someone has such a natural talent.
I just love it's simplicity, it has such a natural flow, like the spoken word, off the cuff, matter of fact yet it's so rhythmical and poetic.
It's the very fact that it's simple, intricate, realistic and very well written that gives it a universal depth.

So you do instrumentals? With guitar?
Why dont you do an instrumental for this?.....and then sing over it?
I really want to hear you sing this, and with flutes, cellos , bassoons... the works!!

I dont know what kind of music you have in mind for this and whether it would fit or not (in the big picture), but I feel the chorus needs to turn at the end :
i thought of you a hundred times, then a hundred more
you discarded all my treasures like bottles upon the shore
 

I really hope there's seconds.....
#6January 30th, 2009 · 05:55 PM
22 threads / 7 songs
164 posts
Canada
actually....
I HAVE put it to music....my bro might throw a little pretty lead to it.....he has a PRS.....with lots of pedals...he's a gear head.  god love 'im.  lol

love the bottles on the shore line......get it.....SHORE LINE......lol

no, really I do...I wanted to add another line at the end....but was stuck.  I like it.....ALOT.

thanks Kings....natural talent huh?

well.....smiling here thinking of THAT huge compliment.

mb
#7January 30th, 2009 · 06:18 PM
340 threads / 59 songs
4,344 posts
United Kingdom
Yea! I thought you wouldn't accept that one straight away.
But I reckon you do!

It's in the first verse you see...

Perfect....
#8January 30th, 2009 · 08:02 PM
22 threads / 7 songs
164 posts
Canada
i always accept good things straight away.

the line you wrote....was PERFECT.    bottles on the shore are carelessly thrown away.

it fits in with the overall feel of the song.

& I DO have a melody......& I can't load it to bandamp 'cause I don't have a mic....at least....not hooked into
my puter.
I gotta find....actually.......MY NEPHEW!!!!  omg....I just had a brainstorm!!!!!!!!!!

thanks kings!

mb
#9February 2nd, 2009 · 05:58 PM
22 threads / 7 songs
164 posts
Canada
my nephew...
hey...have you ever tried to get ahold of a 27 year old?  well....it's NOT easy.

I'm trying to get some of my stuff here in audio &/or visual mode.  I'm workin' on it....& then Denis could lay down some flute....

technology.....is moving pretty slow at my place....just got a puter back after about 2 years without. 

mb
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