#1December 19th, 2008 · 12:36 PM
34 threads / 18 songs
68 posts
Denmark
Brainstorm
This is only a brain storm! not a finished song. This a the first song a I have ever made, and just wants to hear your opine.

Brew of sin/ Taste of sin

He wants to get out
He gonna fall
hes breaking out, even on the brights dawn


Still you cry
Still you brun
Still you are locked down!


Pull your fingers out/in of/to him
catches the last breathe of sinn
(he wont remember a thing)

Will he ever win?

he looks down
but wants to look up
he's gonna fall

Says that only true kings wins
But the light is headding forward
Forward for your head's

Still you cry
Still you brun
Still you are locked down!


Pull your fingers out/in of/to him
catches the last breathe of sinn
(he wont remember a thing)

Yeah

"SOLO"

Still you cry
Still you brun
Still you are locked down!


Pull your fingers out/in of/to him
catches the last breathe of sinn
(he wont remember a thing)
#2December 20th, 2008 · 01:37 AM
27 threads / 2 songs
179 posts
Canada
I'm not really getting the direction of the song. What do you want the song to say? What meaning?
There are some parts that strike me and others that confuse me.

I am thinking it is about being trapped in your own fear and hopelesness.
Being trapped and tied...the stuff about sin...is that self hate about percieved sin or is it actual sin?

I like this:
he looks down
but wants to look up
he's gonna fall
It seems the person is trapped in his own fear. He looks down as if from a height and the only way out of the dilema is to look up and take the next step but he just can't get the courage.to do it...I am getting a feeling of despair.

Can you give a bit of an explaination as to your thought process on this? I enjoy helping out with lyrics...just gotta know where you are heading with it.

-Mark
#3December 20th, 2008 · 06:56 AM
34 threads / 18 songs
68 posts
Denmark
Well, first I was thinking on to write a song of a man who where in prison. And he where ether on the death row or should be in prison for the rest of his life. But he where trick by the system. So he didn't do the crime. That's what I say trying to say with: Says that only true kings wins
But the light is headding forward
Forward for your head's

 but not with big success
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