#1November 21st, 2008 · 12:31 AM
27 threads / 2 songs
179 posts
Canada
Invisible Man...
This is a first draft. Any suggestions or comments?


Invisible Man

Passing by the same man
third time today 
Looks just like the rest
A guitar in hand  
case resting at his feet   
Blue eyes reach through the crowd    
Looks me in my eyes  
I keep on walking  
And he smiles
third time today  

I'd never know him for who he is  
Or even care for who he was  
Or hear the song he had to play 
But he was smiling anyway

Cus, he's our invisible man
Only he knows where he's been
Only he knows what he's seen
All alone and surrounded
He's our invisible man

Flashbacks of those days
are his television  
The voices passing
his radio   
He can only imagine  
World without sin
and what has been
What he can't see with his eyes  
He's 20/20 with his heart
 
He'll sing his song with his soul 
just strum his song of freedom  
The best song you'll never hear    
It's the best song you'll never hear  

Cus, he's our invisible man
Only he knows where he's been
Only he knows what he's seen
All alone and surrounded
He's our invisible man

Glass buildings reflecting the sun
Busy streets still on the run
Another day passes us by
And we never think to ask why
That silent singer is gone
From where he used to stand
between those two tall towers

And now a college band
is there singing about nothing
As it was made to be
By the man we could not see

Cus, he's our invisible man
Only he knows where he's been
Only he knows what he's seen
All alone and surrounded
He's our invisible man
All alone and surrounded
He's our invisible man

-Mark Parks
#2November 24th, 2008 · 10:01 AM
40 threads
165 posts
United States of America
Well...
"What he can't see with his eyes  
He's 20/20 with his heart"

I love that. It can be very metaphoric or it can work realistically.

I like the general direction of the song. I personally think its really deep minded writing.

I really like the chorus. I would love to here it put to music. What kind did you have in mind??

-Sarah
#3November 30th, 2008 · 05:30 AM
27 threads / 2 songs
179 posts
Canada
I didn't have any at first. I was just writing about the fact that we consider homeless as  invisible and in this instance it was a war vet trying to play songs to make it by. He was never noticed but he didn't mind, he was just happy to hear people pass him by. The song was also written as a reminder of what sacrifices were made and what sacrifices will be made in the future.
This is why the man was playing under the two towers and when he was gone(died) there were college students playing carefree where he once stood.
...his not being there is a symbol for things to come....his song of freedom was not to be heard and soon those college kids might have to take up where he left off singing his song of freedom.

So yeah, it was just to get an idea down...but I had the priveledge of listening to some of JosephgVincent's songs such as Thank You and Wing Song.
I think something along the lines of that would fit it well. I can hear it in my head now    Check those songs out when you have the chance!

Anyways, I better stop talking and get to bed...
If anyone has ideas for this, go nuts.
Caio!
-Mark
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