the first part ...made in ableton with atmosphere and my self made sample library (beats)  samples.

I like the drum pattern, goes well with the music. My instinct is to accent between the second and third beat, and falling on the third beat. It will give the rhythm more momentum.
The main synth sound goes on a bit, I assume it's work in progress and you will use it sparingly.
Interesting where you will take this.

Beat farming  yielding  some fat spuds , drums in & out again extends  duration dynamics of piece .Noodle doodle on and see what else grows.

I hear a fly buzzing, and he's been to the streets of Marrakesh. The layers and colorations makes me think of Prodigy and Skinny Puppy, but needs more variation and a vocal part to really stand out as a tune. Surely have the fly relax for a good while after it's introduction, as I had the swatter ready already! The overall vibe surely holds potential, and creating vibes indeed is your strength, but you'd want a more songlike structure if you want to put it through a p-a in any setting.

might work ...depends on context

probably an art installation or similar for me

but not a song

haha

fish

Ah Pup. you hid the nail on is head ( *) 
Swordy ,swordy ...what is a song? why should it be a song?music is just music. some waves .from diferent sources.you like it or you don t.