#1March 1st, 2013 · 12:56 PM
29 threads / 23 songs
197 posts
United States of America
Bargain (Update v2)
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This song is not in a battle


Hello AMPers!

You might have heard an earlier version of this posted in October.  Though not much has been added (the bridge is new, but no vocals recorded yet), I spent a lot of time learning more about EQing and compression so I think things sound much cleaner this time around in this WIP.

ULI mentioned giving more insight on how the song/music/lyrics so here's what I was thinking when I wrote this one:

I had a friend who was pretty depressed.  She kept on insisting that she wasn't really worth much to anyone.  She tries to find good friends but they just think her sorrow and sadness is "made up" and that she's just "pathetic" for feeling the way she does.  Depression is be a nasty thing, especially if people don't truly understand what you're going through.  It inspired me to write this song from her perspective.

[Lyrics]

[verse]
I know I'm not worth the world
So you threw away the ransom letters
I know I'm not a bargain
Obviously you could do better

I'm not a fluffy cloud
All I do is rain
I tried to be the sun
But my light gets in your way

[chorus]
Because I'm reaching out to you
I'm trying to get your attention
Relying on all the things I felt

... But I'm numb
Hope you're doing well
... But I'm numb
Probably couldn't tell

There's a GPS on your desk
I'm the blinking dot, it's my location
But I'm not your point of interest
Changing all your destinations

I know it's kind of rude
So I'm not gonna ask
If you're gonna pay me back
For all the love that's in your past

Because I'm reaching out to you
I'm trying to get your attention
Relying on all the things I felt

... But I'm numb
Hope you're doing well
... But I'm numb
I'm so numb...

[bridge]
I'm so numb
No sense of sensory
Frozen cold anatomy
Somehow hoping you would thaw me out

I'm so numb
Just what got into me
Drew a blank upon epiphany
How could you pencil me into your doubts

Because I'm reaching out to you
I'm trying to get your attention
Relying on all the things I felt

... But I'm numb
Hope you're doing well
... But I'm numb
I'm so numb...

[end]

Emie should be recording the bridge very soon and I'll share another update once it's in its final stages Cheers!

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#2March 1st, 2013 · 04:31 PM
371 threads / 187 songs
3,371 posts
United Kingdom
It's coming together nice.
I love the acoustic at the start, you may want to think about extending it into the chorus then add additional instruments in the second verse.  Have you thought about an intro?
Look forward to hearing the next version.
Great track - Nice for the Radio, I could just imagine waking up to this playing on my Radio alarm clock.
#3March 4th, 2013 · 05:43 PM
340 threads / 59 songs
4,344 posts
United Kingdom
Depression is just that .. a low place you just cant seem to get out of no matter which way you turn. So it's always 'wrong'
NOTHING wrong with this though, oozing talent all the way through, the best of both worlds ... of all worlds.
Bloody Nora you guys are good together ...
Must agree with Denis it's really radio wide world stuff.
#4March 5th, 2013 · 01:24 PM
187 threads / 27 songs
2,795 posts
Germany
If I could....   ....but I can't
Bandamp is the right place to get your feedback on your fabulous work.
Bandamp is the wrong place to push your song(s) to the world where they're supposed to be.
Edit: But it's the first the place !

Thanks for sharing and good luck
#5March 5th, 2013 · 05:52 PM
7 threads / 6 songs
20 posts
United States of America
wouuugghh you have a fabulous voice, and it goes nicely with acoustic guitar.
song well, written well, overall good song!  I like the synth too.
#6May 22nd, 2013 · 04:22 PM
29 threads / 23 songs
197 posts
United States of America
Having Emie record the bridge vocals today as I type this!  Can't wait to share another WIP of this with the vocals in   It's been about 4 months since I've last worked with her!
#7May 30th, 2013 · 01:50 PM
117 threads / 27 songs
1,057 posts
Germany
Ready for airplay.
#8May 31st, 2013 · 05:05 PM
158 threads / 13 songs
2,303 posts
United Kingdom
TritonKeyboarder wrote…
If I could....   ....but I can't
Bandamp is the right place to get your feedback on your fabulous work.
Bandamp is the wrong place to push your song(s) to the world where they're supposed to be.
Edit: But it's the first the place !

Thanks for sharing and good luck
as per TK
good luck
#9June 12th, 2013 · 04:46 PM
110 threads / 55 songs
463 posts
Nepal
love the work mate!!!
great song love the 8 bits sounds.
very near pro production
thanks
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