I'm planning on having this as my last song on the album. Still hard at work on everything, was wondering what you guys thought of this so far?

Lyrics:


there are those who treat their mind

in the same respect as their body

something not to be sold or given away

or explored by a stranger.

its value is not diminished

by remaining unknown by the world.


if, when that person draws

she lets you look over her shoulder

if when she writes

she shows you her words

if when she sings

she lets you hear

know that you are no longer a person


you are the air and the

dust that fills her lungs

you are the pulse of her veins

you are the skin that surrounds her.


she is giving herself to you

and if you let her, she will belong to you forever.

Nice song.
Just needs tidying up on the vocal and lead guitar, maybe play less notes or more space.
You could also try filling out the sound second time round, just to make it sound different.