Rough first draft.

It sure is rough, but plenty of creativity washing about. Sounds like an experimental take on a typical alternative rock groove. Musicality is evident. Would like to hear a properly produced version of this. Interesting so far for sure.

You got lots of ideas going on, a creative approach.
I'd try to simplify the rhythm section to allow for a leading melody.
Also it sounds a bit shrill, try warming up everything and add a bass instrument.
I can't make out the vocals, probably because the Eq on most instruments are dominated by similar upper mid frequencies.

Interesting work, I'd like to hear on how you are going to improve upon it.