#1October 23rd, 2012 · 06:24 PM
31 threads / 19 songs
612 posts
Canada
I See You ( In My Dreams)
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This song is not in a battle


what I'm working on right now...5 different guitar parts, choirs..etc...going for a "dreamy" sound..

   
    All alone on this cold winters night

    Thoughts of you fill my mind

    I'll just close my eyes

    I'll say my goodbyes

    Inner peace at last

   
    You've been gone for oh so long

    With no heartbeat there's no song

    Oh what will it take

    To hear it again

    Dance the night away

   
     I never want to

    wake from this dream

    I have all that I want       
   
    all that I need                           chorus

    Inner child awakened

    smiling, running free

    With you by my side

    shining your light

    Guiding me back home

 

    Staring up at the ceiling

    Tuning out the radio station

    Wipe the sleep from eyes

    Apply my fake smile

    I'll see you again tonight

                  chorus

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#2October 23rd, 2012 · 07:03 PM
171 threads / 24 songs
2,327 posts
United Kingdom
Hi basket case
Nice track

Just a few pointers to help I hope

To make it seem dreamy bring out the organ part ... And lose the guitars down to one or two
The bass is Cool

Less is sometimes more so be ruthless and pull  it down  to maybe organ bass one guitar and drum

Just a suggestion


I see lyrics but no singing
#3October 24th, 2012 · 04:01 PM
31 threads / 19 songs
612 posts
Canada
re: Hi basket case
swordfish wrote…
Nice track

Just a few pointers to help I hope

To make it seem dreamy bring out the organ part ... And lose the guitars down to one or two
The bass is Cool

Less is sometimes more so be ruthless and pull  it down  to maybe organ bass one guitar and drum

Just a suggestion


I see lyrics but no singing
well hello there fishy...I hear ya, thanks..btw the bass is actually 2 gtr lines Do you really want to hear me sing this?  lmao
#4October 30th, 2012 · 03:37 AM
117 threads / 27 songs
1,057 posts
Germany
As Swordie stated, polish the arrangement and mix. Adding a main melody-theme or voice would give more structure.
Some variations on the drum patterns could also help giving structure.

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