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#1October 9th, 2012 · 03:12 PM
187 threads / 27 songs
2,792 posts
Germany
Where Youve Been - beta
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This song is not in a battle


Posted the lyrics yesterday and thought I would give it a chance to capture it on the computer.

This again is a draft, no mix, no real drums... ...they were played on the keyboard in one take. But it's just a thought for not to forget. Don't be so harsh with judging this demo. Maybe you can limit your comments to "like it" or "don't like it" or "yes" or "not" or "white" or "black" or "top" or "flop" or "up" or "down" or .........

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Music: Carsten Koch (TritonKeyboarder)
Lyrics: Sabrina Kay Lyrics review here
Record: All tracks Carsten Koch

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#2October 9th, 2012 · 04:19 PM
371 threads / 187 songs
3,365 posts
United Kingdom
Your vox tone is similar to jiminUK - Would be interesting how it would sound with him hamonizing with you.
Like how it builds to the chorus, the chorus need just a bit more in dynamics or you could add something else to fill out the sound other than the keys you added, or make the drums a bit louder??

Like it - Top - White - Yes - Up - 
#3October 11th, 2012 · 05:28 PM
157 threads / 13 songs
2,299 posts
United Kingdom
re: Where Youve Been - beta
TritonKeyboarder wrote…
Posted the lyrics yesterday and thought I would give it a chance to capture it on the computer.

This again is a draft, no mix, no real drums... ...they were played on the keyboard in one take. But it's just a thought for not to forget. Don't be so harsh with judging this demo. Maybe you can limit your comments to "like it" or "don't like it" or "yes" or "not" or "white" or "black" or "top" or "flop" or "up" or "down" or .........

Sounds like u in my front room .......... so I like it allready!!!
so recording good as expected

verse lyrics just need KRAFTING to sound americ/glish

chorus GREAT!!!.... hit

HEY >>>>>Roxanne is a good friend of mine :)..... fun remark

verse 2 not so bad ..... semi hit
but needs krafting too

the chorus is great!!! ... hit

LOVE IT!!! JUST A TWEAK OF THE LYRICS COULD MAKE THIS A KILLER

haha fish luv ya
#4October 12th, 2012 · 10:57 AM
187 threads / 27 songs
2,792 posts
Germany
Thank you for your detailed review.

May I ask you for helping me to tweak and to kraft the lyrics?
#5October 13th, 2012 · 03:29 PM
157 threads / 13 songs
2,299 posts
United Kingdom
TritonKeyboarder wrote…
Thank you for your detailed review.

May I ask you for helping me to tweak and to kraft the lyrics?


sent a pm
#6October 14th, 2012 · 03:54 AM
117 threads / 27 songs
1,057 posts
Germany
Yes......... White......... Top............. Up. 

Song structure works fine, nothing to change, Imo. You can work out this song how itīs built up.
Only thing to improve / change is the bass line at the end of the song.
Like the lyrics reflecting  a spot of a housewifeīs life.

Courious about a polished version.
#7October 14th, 2012 · 05:45 AM
187 threads / 27 songs
2,792 posts
Germany
Thank you ULI for this reflection

Honestly as this song is sung by a man (me :-) ) the story is about the relation to a girl / woman. SHE is the vagabond in this story not "me" the singer.
And you're right with the bass line. I'm not a bass player at all and did only some weired movements with my fingers on the fret. That's the result in this record. But I am lucky to be able to choose between two (imo) fantastic bass players in my neighbourhood. I am sure that one of them will do a great job. And the good thing is that the end of this song what you've heard here is NOT the real end. It's just a noodle.

And by thinking about that I'd like to hear what/how you would play there
#8October 14th, 2012 · 09:23 AM
340 threads / 59 songs
4,344 posts
United Kingdom
"some weired movements with my fingers on the fret" ... lol random excellence !

Yes ... I like .... tops up ... it's all right

Not sure where black and whit come into it though!

You'll have to practice your 'shit' ... it sounds forced .....
#9October 14th, 2012 · 11:53 AM
187 threads / 27 songs
2,792 posts
Germany
Whats wrong with this 'shit'?
You must hear me swearing in german. I practice this more than 30 times a day.
But I am open to learn it in other languages too 

Can you send me some sound samples? Or better put it in the Audio Review section.
#10October 15th, 2012 · 03:59 PM
157 threads / 13 songs
2,299 posts
United Kingdom
TritonKeyboarder wrote…
Whats wrong with this 'shit'?
You must hear me swearing in german. I practice this more than 30 times a day.
But I am open to learn it in other languages too 

Can you send me some sound samples? Or better put it in the Audio Review section. :razz:

yep i mentioned the 'shit' thing when i first uploaded my comments ..... then downloaded comment cos I thought too rude... haha ....

so glad someone else picked it up ....the shit that is ...haha

its just the inflexion u give it as its not native tongue .... maybe replace with (forgive spelling ) schieze??
#11October 15th, 2012 · 04:03 PM
157 threads / 13 songs
2,299 posts
United Kingdom
swordfish wrote…
TritonKeyboarder wrote…
Whats wrong with this 'shit'?
You must hear me swearing in german. I practice this more than 30 times a day.
But I am open to learn it in other languages too 

Can you send me some sound samples? Or better put it in the Audio Review section. :razz:

yep i mentioned the 'shit' thing when i first uploaded my comments ..... then downloaded comment cos I thought too rude... haha ....

so glad someone else picked it up ....the shit that is ...haha

its just the inflexion u give it as its not native tongue .... maybe replace with (forgive spelling ) schieze??

in fact drop shit and use crap ..... thats better!!!

I don't believe I'm saying this!!!!

poopy fish
#12October 16th, 2012 · 03:49 PM
37 threads / 25 songs
237 posts
United States of America
Has a nice feel ...carston.  the the idea or premise is infinite thumbs up especially for a 1 taker keep it up bro, hope all is well since its been a while
#13October 17th, 2012 · 11:55 AM
117 threads / 27 songs
1,057 posts
Germany
TK wrote…
the story is about the relation to a girl / woman. SHE is the vagabond in this story not "me" the singer.
OK, the lyrics are reflecting  a spot of a housemanīs life. Emancipation.

TK wrote…
It's just a noodle.
All in all the bassline isnīt that bad.  The ending was just a bit "aside". For a noodle itīs totally ok. Shall just sketch the way how it could go.


Scheisse !!! This word is the firstone which EVERY foreigner learns when he comes to germany. Pronounced like  :  shice    

Carsten, you swear only 30 times a day ? Since I have a PC I swear about 300! times per day. At least.
#14October 17th, 2012 · 01:11 PM
77 threads / 59 songs
919 posts
Netherlands
really a lovely 'noodle'! love to hear next version.
like!
#15October 24th, 2012 · 01:13 AM
30 threads / 30 songs
94 posts
United States of America
Every thing you do kicks! Love it
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