Where Youve Been - beta |
Posted the lyrics yesterday and thought I would give it a chance to capture it on the computer.
This again is a draft, no mix, no real drums... ...they were played on the keyboard in one take. But it's just a thought for not to forget. Don't be so harsh with judging this demo. Maybe you can limit your comments to "like it" or "don't like it" or "yes" or "not" or "white" or "black" or "top" or "flop" or "up" or "down" or .........
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Music: Carsten Koch (TritonKeyboarder)
Lyrics: Sabrina Kay Lyrics review here
Record: All tracks Carsten Koch
This again is a draft, no mix, no real drums... ...they were played on the keyboard in one take. But it's just a thought for not to forget. Don't be so harsh with judging this demo. Maybe you can limit your comments to "like it" or "don't like it" or "yes" or "not" or "white" or "black" or "top" or "flop" or "up" or "down" or .........
edit:
Music: Carsten Koch (TritonKeyboarder)
Lyrics: Sabrina Kay Lyrics review here
Record: All tracks Carsten Koch
Your vox tone is similar to jiminUK - Would be interesting how it would sound with him hamonizing with you.
Like how it builds to the chorus, the chorus need just a bit more in dynamics or you could add something else to fill out the sound other than the keys you added, or make the drums a bit louder??
Like it - Top - White - Yes - Up -
Like how it builds to the chorus, the chorus need just a bit more in dynamics or you could add something else to fill out the sound other than the keys you added, or make the drums a bit louder??
Like it - Top - White - Yes - Up -
re: Where Youve Been - beta |
TritonKeyboarder wrote…
Posted the lyrics yesterday and thought I would give it a chance to capture it on the computer.
This again is a draft, no mix, no real drums... ...they were played on the keyboard in one take. But it's just a thought for not to forget. Don't be so harsh with judging this demo. Maybe you can limit your comments to "like it" or "don't like it" or "yes" or "not" or "white" or "black" or "top" or "flop" or "up" or "down" or .........
Sounds like u in my front room .......... so I like it allready!!!
so recording good as expected
verse lyrics just need KRAFTING to sound americ/glish
chorus GREAT!!!.... hit
HEY >>>>>Roxanne is a good friend of mine :)..... fun remark
verse 2 not so bad ..... semi hit
but needs krafting too
the chorus is great!!! ... hit
LOVE IT!!! JUST A TWEAK OF THE LYRICS COULD MAKE THIS A KILLER
haha fish luv ya
Thank you for your detailed review.
May I ask you for helping me to tweak and to kraft the lyrics?
May I ask you for helping me to tweak and to kraft the lyrics?
TritonKeyboarder wrote…
Thank you for your detailed review.
May I ask you for helping me to tweak and to kraft the lyrics?
sent a pm
Yes......... White......... Top............. Up.
Song structure works fine, nothing to change, Imo. You can work out this song how itīs built up.
Only thing to improve / change is the bass line at the end of the song.
Like the lyrics reflecting a spot of a housewifeīs life.
Courious about a polished version.
Song structure works fine, nothing to change, Imo. You can work out this song how itīs built up.
Only thing to improve / change is the bass line at the end of the song.
Like the lyrics reflecting a spot of a housewifeīs life.
Courious about a polished version.
Thank you ULI for this reflection
Honestly as this song is sung by a man (me :-) ) the story is about the relation to a girl / woman. SHE is the vagabond in this story not "me" the singer.
And you're right with the bass line. I'm not a bass player at all and did only some weired movements with my fingers on the fret. That's the result in this record. But I am lucky to be able to choose between two (imo) fantastic bass players in my neighbourhood. I am sure that one of them will do a great job. And the good thing is that the end of this song what you've heard here is NOT the real end. It's just a noodle.
And by thinking about that I'd like to hear what/how you would play there
Honestly as this song is sung by a man (me :-) ) the story is about the relation to a girl / woman. SHE is the vagabond in this story not "me" the singer.
And you're right with the bass line. I'm not a bass player at all and did only some weired movements with my fingers on the fret. That's the result in this record. But I am lucky to be able to choose between two (imo) fantastic bass players in my neighbourhood. I am sure that one of them will do a great job. And the good thing is that the end of this song what you've heard here is NOT the real end. It's just a noodle.
And by thinking about that I'd like to hear what/how you would play there
Whats wrong with this 'shit'?
You must hear me swearing in german. I practice this more than 30 times a day.
But I am open to learn it in other languages too
Can you send me some sound samples? Or better put it in the Audio Review section.
You must hear me swearing in german. I practice this more than 30 times a day.
But I am open to learn it in other languages too
Can you send me some sound samples? Or better put it in the Audio Review section.
TritonKeyboarder wrote…
Whats wrong with this 'shit'?
You must hear me swearing in german. I practice this more than 30 times a day.
But I am open to learn it in other languages too
Can you send me some sound samples? Or better put it in the Audio Review section. :razz:
yep i mentioned the 'shit' thing when i first uploaded my comments ..... then downloaded comment cos I thought too rude... haha ....
so glad someone else picked it up ....the shit that is ...haha
its just the inflexion u give it as its not native tongue .... maybe replace with (forgive spelling ) schieze??
swordfish wrote…
TritonKeyboarder wrote…
Whats wrong with this 'shit'?
You must hear me swearing in german. I practice this more than 30 times a day.
But I am open to learn it in other languages too
Can you send me some sound samples? Or better put it in the Audio Review section. :razz:
yep i mentioned the 'shit' thing when i first uploaded my comments ..... then downloaded comment cos I thought too rude... haha ....
so glad someone else picked it up ....the shit that is ...haha
its just the inflexion u give it as its not native tongue .... maybe replace with (forgive spelling ) schieze??
in fact drop shit and use crap ..... thats better!!!
I don't believe I'm saying this!!!!
poopy fish
TK wrote…
the story is about the relation to a girl / woman. SHE is the vagabond in this story not "me" the singer.
TK wrote…
It's just a noodle.
Swordie wrote…
schieze??
Scheisse !!! This word is the firstone which EVERY foreigner learns when he comes to germany. Pronounced like : shice
Carsten, you swear only 30 times a day ? Since I have a PC I swear about 300! times per day. At least.
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