#1September 25th, 2012 · 02:36 AM
29 threads / 23 songs
197 posts
United States of America
Beautiful World

This song is not in a battle

And older page in my poetry book.  This one is almost 5 years old and I think I was listening to a lot of Death Cab for Cutie at the time and my guitar playing was getting better.


The white on the plane
The clouds with their greys
The bark on the tree
And its chlorophyll-ed greens

The red from a rose
And the orange Autumn groves
The glow from the sun was a yellow one

It's a beautiful world...

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#2September 25th, 2012 · 03:09 AM
3 threads / 2 songs
30 posts
United States of America
good job!
This was a nice track I loved the guitar work, just wish it was a tad longer. Over all it was a nice ditty though. keep up the good work.
#3September 25th, 2012 · 04:44 PM
2 threads / 1 songs
85 posts
United Kingdom
It's short, but could easily be like an intermission track as part of an album if you did still like it enough to use it, don't hear them often any more. Guitar playing is simply beautiful. I think I was expecting your vocals to be a little 'softer' based on the lyrics and theme, but they're fine. I thought I could hear a twinge of death cab for cutie in your singing in a previous song too. don't remember if I mentioned that at the time tho 
#4September 26th, 2012 · 03:36 PM
371 threads / 187 songs
3,382 posts
United Kingdom
It's a Beautiful world indeed - you should work on extending this.
How about some sounds of nature, a couple of guitar solos and perhaps one more verse or a repeat of the the chorus.

More guitar work please 
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