Hey guys,

I just wrote and recorded a new song. Just a quick mix. What do you guys think of the lyrics?
I'm not too sure about some expressions I use for the feelings I'm trying to describe.
Any feedback would be greatly appreciated!

You wake up from your daydream
It has always been the same
You sought that special someone
Who knows how to play the game

Well, you better start running
Cause the bridge is burning down
Do you want to swim that river
When you know that you will drown

I keep longing for the day that we were brothers in the rain
When misery was far away and death was still a game
We believed in destiny, stood strong in days unkind
Now we carry on like leaflets in the wind

You look for friendly faces    
Just one figure more humane
Then you see your own reflection
In a shiny windowpane

The sky is breaking open
And your past comes pouring down
Could you do anything but hope for
A way to touch some solid ground

I keep longing for the day that we were brothers in the rain
When misery was far away and death was still a game
We believed in destiny, stood strong in days unkind
Now we carry on like leaflets in the wind

We carry on together
Wherever we may land
We are crossings oceans
fens and desert sand

Where have you been hiding
Come back to me my friend
We'll go down together
As brothers hand in hand
Oh come back to me brother
Leaflets in the wind

I keep longing for the day that we were brothers in the rain
When misery was far away and death was still a game
We believed in destiny, stood strong in days unkind
Now we carry on like leaflets in the wind

I'm no expert with lyrics, but they look good to me.

The intro/outro reminded me of 'Let it Be' by the Beatles, it's OK, but perhaps you can work on the phrasing to make it sound more unique.

The structure is good, nice build up to the bridge after the the Chorus. I like the choir like vocals, but would have liked to heard them louder in the mix - try panning the choir vocals hard left and right. You should be able to raise them in the mix and still hear the lead vocal clearly.

Love the Piano tone - Excellent touch - how did you record it, what keyboard/Piano and software are you using?

It's a great song as an acoustic, but I'd like to hear another version building up to a full band/orchestra.

Enjoyed listening - Well done

Edit*
I sensed you should hold on the note in this line on the word 'WIND'
"Now we carry on like leaflets in the wind"

You are such a talented guy , another who can create 'the whole show', like Denis said this would be amazing going into a full out Orchestra ... which I know you could do !

Your lyrics are beautiful and touching.
leaflets in the wind doesn't do it for me ... it could be lost in the translation yet "Als folders in de lucht" is het ook niet.
Beautiful composition just the same.

I can see you interpreting this song alone with a piano on a dark stage under a spotlight.
The next "vision" is seeing you on stage with  a piano, but in front of an orchestra which makes this song full, rich and : colossal.

U.L.I.

Really enjoyed this. Great piano sound.
I like the imagery of leaflets in the wind - for me it comes across as something forgotton/unwanted and left aimlessly moving forwards.

Keep it up.

Beautiful song and YES PLEASE tell us how you recorded the piano! What piano/keyboard did you use and how did you record it? Recently I've been trying to get a really good piano sound but I haven't found the sweet spot yet.

Beautiful song. and I think you hit the lyrics dead on. I love a song with good lyrics.