So I've picked up new inspiration And I'm working on a new tune, but I don't want to hurry recording it, for a change, so I'm going to let it "crystalise" before putting it to tape.

In the meantime, I still want to upload something, and as I've come across some nice little ditties while digging through the archives, I thought - why the hell not!

So this is a half baked poem put to a strange soundscape of sorts. My new tune is nothing like this at all.

Nothing "half-baked" about this. There's really a lot going on here -  cool overall vibe, well-composed - nice, graceful twists and turns in the composition. Good choices overall of effects - love the phase shifted voice. Love the juxtaposition of a slow plodding bass/ trap drum kit interwoven with a catchy double-time Spanish (or something?) rhythm (which is laid back so well in the piece, that it's very complementary). Your vocal performance is perfect here. The whole thing is fairly perfect to me - the song has an arresting quality..

This sounds like the male counterpart of Ann Clark or Ursula Rucker. I love that psychedelic mood of it.
While I try to follow the words the music is carrying me away like floating on dark clouds of sounds.
Very suspenseful.
For me itīs worthwhile to rework it. A new mixing and it will be a great track.

U.L.I.

It's amazing what you find behind the closet PX
Your music certainly has identity, you performed it well, it's an interesting song, one that grows on you.

Look forward to hearing your new stuff

LOVE THE MUSIC
But its a conversation track
Currently reminds me of ......... someone reading from a very personal diary

could u re-work...craft the words into a song
perhaps using mirror reflections???

Instead of a ramble........
as a song to stick in my head this doesnt work
u know what im saying I hope

focus the lyric a bit?

like i love u ....... u hate me
i feel u ..... u miss me
catch the train ........ miss the train....
i kill u ..... u save me
play with words ...... play with the mirror??

the riff lends itself to it???

u will probably hit a few ''hooks'' on the way... to make the song stick in the head!!!
at the moment it has none... to me

just an idea

fish/hsif