Well I have not written anything in a few months, but last night I have an urge to make something. My original idea was to create a very slow background music piece, I started off with a piano, then I suddenly changed something and it reminded me of a techno/electric song, so I changed the instruments and turned up the tempo and finally added a beat (and a few other things) and got this. Tell me how it is (and be brutal)

You have some good sounds, and interesting patterns, but the whole thing seems to be a lot of random sections stuck together. You need to create some sort of overall structure for it. You probably have enough material for 2 or even 3 songs if you overlay and develop it a bit more.

OK. To be brutal : ...............................................jokin´..
For a "one-night-stand" it´s ok. Keeping ideas.............................
Like the commentors before I can see some scetches, ideas, maybe visions of a piece of music.
But I can´t hear any conception or structure over there.  To me it´s like pieces of a puzzle needed to be assembled to an entire, eclectic piece.
Analogical to the art of painting I´d say : you have a canvas, colours, a paint-brush and a frame. Now it´s up to you to paint a picture.
I´m looking forward to the next step.
U . L . I .
P.S. .....ääähmm, ...jazz? Where´s that jazz ?????????

Its all about style and I really like this.  This song is awesome. If you ever want to collaborate you can check out my songs; we are doing something semi-smilar.