This is the first song I wrote from start to finish.I did the arrangement  and wrote the lyrics.Unfortunately I  CAN'T sing.
Thanks for listening and please post comments,I really enjoyed creating and listening to this song just curious what others might think.


Punkrd's Lyrics

Intro

Power Chords, Hypnotic beats
Living out of trash cans
Life on the street

Mohawks,piercings tattoo ink
Knocked off a liquor store
Blood on the street

Pre Chorus/Chorus

Here we stand today,2 be judged by you

Take all of your bullshit rules,it's all been done
It's been overused!
Take all of you bullshit views,try something different
Try something new

Verse 1

Little girl your too young to die
Your drowning in a bottle there's tears in your eyes
Mommy didn't love you,Daddy didn't care
Same f*&^%$& story all over again
Created illusions,lost your dreams
Used like a f$%^%$* doll
No self esteem
Found your love in all the wrong places
There's too many lovers
All the same faces

Verse 2

Little boy it's time to grow up
Your living too fast tempted by lust
Sold your soul for one more fix ,didn't use a condom
Throw aids in the mix
Where are all your so called friends
The party's over,alone in the end
Wasted the life your Mother gave
No more suffering
Cries from the grave.

Love the guitar effects Bass too high. Drum sounds not great, but the beat definitely works.

dude what was that?

maybe you cant sing but you can write decent lyrics.

one without the other is a bit naff though. (no offence) how about grabbing your mates to karaoke the lyrics for you after a few beers. I think that might work.

if you produce a high quality backing trak where you have obviously spent bucketloads of time do yourself a favour and get a singer..................without it this composition doesnt stand up.

sorry

i don't mind it think you've done OK ,but i like the sound of real drum audio more than midi. overall i give it a 7 out of 1o

Well done but u seriously cant sing- the base and guitar r really gd tho!!

Thanx too everyone who took the time to listen,I myself also like real drums and bass but I tried the band thing and it lasted 3 months......this guy cant make it today this guy has a date this day blah blah blah.We were only getting together twice a week(for fun),it was pathetic that we wouldn't have a complete band 50o/o of the time.I decided to keep my creativity to myself because I know I can count on myself lol.

What was what dude?

dude, you are really talented. you are going far with talent like this

i love a good guitar solo. good for you.

good tune overall, definately needs real drums though! It's a bit predictable as well, it needs something extra to give it the edge over all the other pop-punky sounding artists out there. good stuff, keep it coming....

Dude!!!

GReat song but it seriously needs lyrics even if they are poorley sung!!!!!!!