Hey, back again

Ok, still playing around, discovering more about altering sounds and such.

Again tell me what you think (honestly) and this is not the full thing, but I thought it would be better to get it critiqued before I carry on.

You are Ok on the melody line, just think you could have picked a better VST, it's sort of computer Game sound, but it would OK for a computer game, so what's to say 

I mentioned before suggesting you create a rhythm first. If you know nothing about rhythms, just listen to some of your favourites and break down the bass drum and snare first, then try to create something on those lines.

Have a basic song structure

Intro
Verse
Chorus
Bridge
Vesre
Chorus
Outro

Then you may want to start learning about Chords and progression, look up 12 bar blues thats a good way to start.

Keep it up