Again I recorded this song on my mp3 player today at 10:00 am (25/07/05). Tell me what you think.

I can see the direction you are aiming for. I'd suggest working on the melody to get the 'lead hook' you want, and then start looking towards some more diverse intrumentation, chordal backing etc. Look forward to hearing more

aww this sounds like some of the stuff i started with,
cute!
well done 

Its pretty good just needs a lil more umph

it's not bad but you need a bit more stuff and other instruments,too. good for the beginning.

meh... sorry, drink coke, play again...

An "A for effort" though lol as some of my old teachers used to say!

but don't give up... keep rockin