Well here it is remixed :P Hopefully better with more low end.

MUCH BETTER MIX

If you want to keep the stops, I would accent the notes more, work on the drums on that part too

Good luck with the Vox

This is a really interesting piece. I find myself listening to it over and over again. Each time I discover something new about it. Great Work!

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I really like this! A really good idea with really cool inputs of instrumentation there, with the breaks I think the timing or tempo or something needs to be a bit re-worked. Really love the guitar and bass.
Reminds me of Rush a little bit....just needs some squealy high pitched vocals.

definitely needs vox. keep at it this is a very good idea.