I'm completely new :-/

Welcome to BandAMP!!

I love the consept of the song, would love if you worked on the vocals a bit more, get them a bit tigher, although you may have sung this after having a few pints of carlsberg special brew down at the ol' "Broken Hearts Bar"

Cheers

Thanks Denis! 

Always nice to see more people get involved with this site.

I agree with dennis that some vocs could be raised but then again it gives it a more real time live recording. Or Is that what you did? Was this actually done at a bar? If so then I say leave the vocs where their at but add in some odd noises of glasses and murmurring would be a nice touch. Reminded me of a band called "The Microphones." simular style. Over all still enjoyed it.

Solatcha!

Thanks sword, actually, the noises were added to the original recording to get the bar feeling. I might try to mix this song again sometime.

Thank you MikeyDivine, and cheers

May be you should have a few beers down ya before you do the song...it might bring you into tune.
Nice idea and nice voices in there but just not on the same level...listen to each other...find the strongest....listen to each other independently...anything, just get in tune.

Thank you kings, you#re right, we might redo the vocals someday later.

cool idea for a song and welcome to the amp man!
lol...first thing i notice....the background kitchen sound....www.freesound.org eh? i used the same one a while back (in nothing i uploaded). awesome man!!

redo the vocals...this really reminds me of Joseph Arthur. if you havent heard of him check him out.

welcome to the amp and keep going!

Thanks for your kind words, TheKunadiun! I used the background sound from a site for audio book production, except for the "Booo!" at the end :P
Thanks for your recommendations, too! Let me hear what you're doing
Have a nice day my friend.

I like the chordal progression of this song. I think the harmony really detracts from the charm of the lyrics. The intonation is really off. You're also playing a harmonica in the wrong key for this song during the lead.

Thank you krysbaker,
well it was probably wrong to do the off intonation, we originally tried to make it sound a bit like a drunk pub act, but I got that critique from many people now. Maybe we'll need to re-record it someday... I only owned a cheap harmonica in C-Major back then, but one of us is going to invest in a professional one
Glad you like the lyrics and progression, though, and thanks for your help!

Hi,

You mentioned you were going for that 'drunk pub' sort of thing - I think you nailed it. I actually really like the way this is - with that in mind.  It would be nice to hear the song re-recorded though as like an 'album version' that's cleaner and really lets the song come through without some of the distractions.

Good tune though!
Brian