#1February 24th, 2010 · 01:02 PM
151 threads / 150 songs
265 posts
United States of America
Sleeping in the City

This song is not in a battle

This is probably the most overused chord structure of all time (Pachabel's Canon), but I nevertheless like it. This song went through many iterations, as I kept messing up the timing.

Outside the cold darkness is falling
Quickly turning into snow
I shuffle about waiting
To give you the sign that I know

On these streets the eyes are following
Such is life in this place
I have feelings that someone's watching
And seeing my disgrace

Living in society
Is taking my sobriety
I'm running out of options to survive
Sleeping in the city
Is making me pity
Everyone who can call themselves alive

The losers are the newest winners
The ones who think that they are cool
Now I'm the one who's left out
Now I am the truest tool

I can still recall their laughter
At the thought of you and I
The one whom I sought after
Is it really a surprise?

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#2February 25th, 2010 · 10:37 PM
92 threads / 12 songs
893 posts
United States of America
When I see another song by "TheOtherGuy89" I think 'here's a righteous singer/player/songwriter...let's see what he's got this time"... and this song does not disappoint at all! In fact I really love everything about it...the  initial, quiet "Hendrixy" guitar, coupled with the almost spoken first verse...then the introduction of the overdriven chunky, plodding rhythm given rise to the second verse which seems to build effectively throughout the song. The content of the lyrics reflect a disenfranchised, fatalistic seething quality that I find irresistible. You create feeling in your lyrics through use of imagery, abstraction, and a ruminative quality that is sheer genius! The real genius of this is that in this piece you are able to put it all together...the composition, the lyric content, the instrumentation...it all supports the sentiment. Damn! well done!
#3February 26th, 2010 · 05:15 PM
18 threads / 18 songs
54 posts
very good song, the voice is very soft and pleasant, but the guitar needs a better sound or equalization.
#4February 27th, 2010 · 07:23 AM
371 threads / 187 songs
3,384 posts
United Kingdom
Chord progression doesn't sound overused to me, you have packed in lots of variation to keep it sounding interesting.

I had an ispirational thought, I would love to hear you sing some sustained notes hear and there.

#5March 2nd, 2010 · 09:05 PM
151 threads / 150 songs
265 posts
United States of America
Thanks guys. Which guitar are you talking about Freak?
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