I wrote some riff thingers, and tom lead the rest. i like this track.

I think i will change the chorus riff, and maybe even drums. after i've heard it over and over now, i guess i don't really like it. doean's fit. FEEDBACK PLEASE.

and by the way the end says:
one's mistakes are carved upon the stone-record of life
yet wise is the one who reads the record, and lives a better moment.

well, i liked the begining riff, but really hate the chorus; to much trach metal 4 me ( the most metal i listen is Dream Theater) but as i said, begining is good

The screaming sounds like my father after he's received one of my less-than-stellar report cards.

The drums could be doing a lot more for this song.

The intro progression starts off well, but just fails to go anywhere.  The D7 following the Dm just sounds out of place.