This is a new song I wrote today,
thanks to Olaf for his extra vocals & feedback

Re-uploaded due to some distortion

Lyrics:

Lying in the grass
Tiny drips of water on my face
Thinking about the past
About those streams of endless rainy days

I'm Dreaming in your bed
Feel your steady breathing on my chest
I'm Trying to recall
Why those good old times have stopped to pass

I have come to
Mind that I want you
Come here and show me
That you feel the same

I am too afraid to stay
Because I am drifting far away

How did it come to end
I treated you like a diamond ring
You were my left and right
And now I'm stuck somewhere in between

Time has seemed to stop
Empty bottles lying all around
Through grubby glass I see
That life has only ended in my mind

I am too afraid to stay
Because I am drifting far away

I want to float on the sea of love
But I need a new boat
All the holes in this sinking ship
Keep me from getting home

Nice. Very flowing.

It sounds very good. By my first impression, the vocals sound really strong through the beginning, but they sound like they're getting weaker as the song goes on. I'm not really sure how to describe it. I could be making this up.

I would have liked for the bridge at the end to resolve back into the chorus instead of a fade out.

Very nice song overall. The vocals really brought it together.

Hmm  interesting I thought the same on the first upload Re the Bridge at the end.

I do like the song

Really love what you came up with. Lovely song. Brings a kind of atmosphere known to me from the Moody Blues recordings. Personally, I would work on the mix again. I know it sounds quite OK, but with a different approach to the mix it might turn out to be much MUCH better. I mean, the bass is very weak and practically inaudible, I would definitely try NOT to pan the vocals everywhere - like, in the verse there should only be one vocal track, and only in the chorus you could pan it left right. that kind of solution could bring some dramatism into the rrcording. Anyway, if you feel you'd like to redo it, you should. If not, leave it as it is cause it's one of the nicest recordning you can find on bandamp. I'll be glad to help if you need any help.
JIM

Hi guys,

Thanks very much for the positive replies!

To JPB, great that you like it. I like your feedback, very useful. I love your track "Sea Of Life" by the way.
We should talk about creating a song together if you'd like that!

Steven