It's been said if you copy from one person it's plagiarism,but if you copy from alot of people it's research!!!So here's a song with some research.I know the mix is terrible and my singing is even worse!!Anyway here it goes.

Sounds like fun.
The vox are Ok, just timing is off, Dire straits vox aren't brill either, just good ol Rock & Roll
Needs more bottom in the mix, take the mids and treble down a bit.

It's a start. The lyrics are fun to listen to and get an idea of your research. It's a fine first draft but you can definitely improve it. Start by giving the song a bit of planning. Get a clear idea of when you're singing and when you're not going to be and work on your timing, both the vocals and the guitar. I'd look into adding a bridge or a solo or something to make it a little more interesting as well, either that or shorten it and condense your lyrics to the lines with which you're most happy. Good start. Hope to hear more.

yeah vox kind of remind me of dire straits.

really cool jam and everything good composition just gotta work the kinks out. good job!

I didn't think Straits. I thought Tom Petty, but I can see Dire. I agree with the rest though, your vocal time is like an 1/8 of a measure off every line. Like you tried splicing in your voice, but pasted it in just a bit late, so it's pushed forward through the whole song. Fix that and I'll download it. :}