A song I wrote :P

P.S. I'm not a drummer or a singer so don't judge me

I like it. The drums and the vocals isn't that bad. The way you sing it fits this song your style is playing right now. Although when you change the drum beat, it doesn't really flow well. That's all I could find for critism, but ofcourse with time you get better. Hope I could read the lyrics.

Here are the lyrics

Whats it like from inside looking out?
Can you even see their faces when they bow?
Better rest your weary head
for mine would feel like lead
If I were you...

This music is the death of me
I fight because I still believe
Although you see we're never free
of this burden, irony

Find a place thats nice and dark
for the darkness suits your heart
Dont let any of them in
For they might find your sins
your past...

This music is the death of me
I fight because I still believe
Although you see we're never free
of this burden, irony

From my point of view, the main thing that lets this song down is the recording and mixing - the vocals are fine (with a few wibbley bits!), as is the guitar playing (ok, it's not brilliant but is perfectly fine for this song).  I'm also missing a bass, which I think would pull every thing together well.

So overall - the construction etc are all ok.

I'd say if you worked on the mixing (perhaps with a tiny smattering of effects thrown in there) this would be a good song.

Keep at it - I'd like to hear more.

Jim A