A song me (vocals + piano) and my friend Rowan (guitar and bass) wrote one afternoon. Remeniscing on summers past...

not my style, but think the song is good. vocals r quite weak; lack of feeling and smth out of tune, but generally the song sing good. keep on rocking!

yeah, if you put a little more force into the vocals as you sing them, i think it'd do a lot for the song.  granted, you don't have to belt it out, but just the same, i think it'd help.  i really like the piano line, though.  it's really nice.  i have trouble writing stuff like that, and i was the piano man for my band!

Good start, sounds like an early version of a song thats gonna be quite good... As advised by other crits, try and put a bit more feel into the vocal, sounds like where you recorded you have to be concious of your neighbours or something, but give it your all any way, i can hear a good voice in there... Also, run your keyboard through a bit of reverb, i presume you have recorded your drums and piano on the same take, do them seperate so that you can add the right amount of reverb to your piano without making the drums sound wrong... And bring rowans guitar further forward into the mix... All in all a good song, now you just need to grab it by the balls...

Ditto dcspoonman. I'm likin the arrangement. Keep it up mate

Not my cup o' tea, but good!

I really like it, thou like what others say more passion into the singing. I like it though, it catchy and the lyrics are great.