I'm not too happy about this song.. So I want to hear everybody's opinions. 
Tell me what you think.


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Lyrics:

She's afraid that she will collapse, oh
Never say, never say never, no
The storm passed a long time ago, oh

And it looks like she will die
I'm afraid to tell her why
she will...


Now again she's feeling depressed, oh
Don't wanna be like this forever, no
But then again don't you ever say never, no

And it looks like she will die
I'm afraid to tell her why
It looks like she will die
I'm afraid to tell her why
she will...


She's afraid that she will collapse, oh
She will never, never say never, no

And it looks like she will die
I'm afraid to tell her why
It looks like she will die
I'm afraid to tell her why
she will...

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Well I like the guitar work, the rhythm and percussive hits are very effective.The vocal melody and harmonies too are very cool. Mixing wise your vox could use a brighter equalization - but all in all it's another neat little track, very sweet on the ears!

However, for criticism about the lyrics: I find it pretty hard to understand what exactly is going on here, if this song was part of a themed album or playlist then it might be a bit clearer I suppose, but as a listener I find myself dropped in the middle of a story with no real concept of who the dramatis personae are. Who is she? In what way is she sick? What is she going to die from? Do I have to take it literally or figuratively?

The lyrics do not clearly point this out, they are quite ambiguous. Then again that may be what you intended.

Still I like the tune don't get me wrong! An original and well executed construction with great harmonies! Cheers.

Sad song, but you should tell her... no IFs, no BUTs
I know this situation very well, just hanging with my feet above the ground and have no clue how successful the last surgery was....

...still waiting


But other than that everyone of us will go by time

The chorus reminds me of some Beatles riff. And - don't get me wrong - your soft (and very good) voice is not strong enough to sing that lyrics.

Nice harmonies

I wont repeat what has already been mentioned, except you should definitely work on the eq, brighten it up.

I always get the eq from the mic positioning first, then small tweaks if necessary.

Keep 'em comin'

I really like this. great guitar work and vocals, and yes your vocals could be a bit brighter.
i really like the way you took this and sung it the way you did. it fits it. straight from the heart.

your voice cracking on its edge during the chorus adds a lot to the song. great job.

I like how the sound of the song is so in sync with the mood... very very melancholy

I like the song. More certainty in your voice will cure the situation. Good luck!