A NEW SONG
What Are You Doing?
I feel accomplished. Although I wished I can sing better... I really worked hard for the instrumental so here you go. I don't know what genre would this be. I'm think rock, pop, punk, or alternative... Idk.  I suggest you guys using the headphones, or two speakers so you get the most out of it. But here's the lyrics down here:
What Are You Doing

v1
Every night he lies in his bed
with nothing taken to the head
dreaming what can happen next
thinking what else can he wreck?

v2
slowly cutting his strings away
acting as the predator and prey
who never risk that jump
stuck inside that harmless trap... so afraid

c
What You're doing passing by
all these rooms that make you cry
let it out, but don't let time fly you by

Can't you see the rusted key
that you hold and open and drives
why don't you? just take that one only ride

v3
Dreaming of a treasure appears
opened, nothing but empty years
he wonders, why there is no gold
realized he shivers in cold

v4
So afraid
that he has nothing to give
How can he drive
Hiding  
behind the unwritten slate
How can he see... so afraid

B/T
wake up, life's not a dream anymore
stop wasting time and open that door
because this is all you'll ever have

get up, the world's leaving you behind
better run fast, and follow a line
because this is all you'll ever have


Some suggestions would help,
Thanks,
rap

Sweet man! Lots of clipping or noise or something when all the instruments come together...but other than that this is really sweet!!!!
Just give it a try singing and see how it sounds...if it really sounds like garbage try and find someone who can sing.

Man I really love the chorus.
This is freaking awesome.
Like totally inspirationally freaking awesome.

But you know it could use some work, but I think this has turned out pretty good. Maybe you should look into the noise when all the instruments come together...
Maybe its just the distortion your using on the rythm guitar.

Cool mini solo

Amazing chorus.

Awesome ending guitar solo - bleeding with feeling

Maybe do a collab with someone here on bandamp that has those kind of edgy vocals that almost whine...it would fit perfectly. Heck i might be able to do it...but then again i might not lol...i think i might be able to do the chorus

ROCK ON!!!!

This is SCREEEMMING for a Vocal.

It's sounds Punky, but yes ORIGINAL.

I'd just lighten the bass drum that's all. It will give it awesome dynamics if you do.

LOTS OF ENERGY!!!

ROCK ON INDEED!!!

BACKING TRACK..........

Loads of time invested in this ..........and its very cool........

So where are the lyrics ........... or are we supposed to READ ALONG and sing inside head???

Gimme a break!!

Waiting for finished deal........with baited breath!!!

Fish

haha ooops... sorry I planned to put in the track with the vocals. I put in the instrumental instead, my bad. Sorry for that, but thanks for the praises. That defenitely give more reason to continue on my pursue on my music. So I'm gonna delete this and have the one with the vocals.

Awesome cant wait to hear it