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I suggest putting some electric percussion for this I think that would improve it. Maybe a solid quarter beat kick (dance-type) drum throughout the whole song would do. Unless you thought of this as just a song with no drums. I don't know but I thought it kinda lacks progression, it sounds the same to me (well I know it's completly repetitive) but it often would make the listener to stop listening to the song.

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point well made

I like the retro organ sound and playing.. I wished the eq'n was just a bit brighter on the vocals.. they are not clear in the mix... are you burping in the song.. what is that.. hahahah.  I can't make out the lyrics to well.  Nice storm sounds in the song.

This has a particular vibe to it. Strongly reminds me of Edward Ka-Spel's earlier solo work, maybe cross hatched with Velvet Underground. Again the "poetic" nature (also in the "visual poetry"-like Sunshine Girl lyric you posted) really fuels imagination, but also makes me think that you might be on drugs or something (or prescription medication atleast)

Well done though.

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