It's just so my style Soulful lyrics, sweet backvocals and a messy overdubbed guitar solo.
Tell me what you think, I'm taking all suggestions very seriously.

--- --- --- Dream --- --- ---
Not yet defeated but I lift my hands up
I'm tired fighting with your words
It's strange how we just grew up
And not everything is beautiful around

How many bad dreams will I have till I learn to live
They grow and blow up and I wake up again
Frightened frightened - is there a reason I'm still
Fighting fighting - Lord help me I'm just not that bright

You have on paper all my past life
That's why you tell that you know me well
But if your paper is missing one day
I'm not the man you think to have in mind

Thanks for listening

Hey dude, this is really good. I love the lyrics and the arrangement.
The music is very well put together.

I think in the last verse you should kick up the emotion in the vocals a bit. You seemed to gather a bit of momentum as you went, but for me the song begs for a bit more on the vocals.

I would keep the backup vocals...they are nice. For the lead vocals, I don't mean going overboard with the punk sound or anything. What I mean is I am not feeling you feeling it...if you know what I mean lol.

I would suggest trying to sing the song right out in your native language, but really put everything into it. Then sing it in English with the same effort.

I've listened to this 4 times while writing this. I feel that the difference from good and great is a bit of soul.

btw. I love the chorus....very catchy!


-Mark


 

I like the feel of the track.

The synth blends in beautifully with the guitars and vox.

I instinctly thought you could try using echo instead of reverb for the vox, you could try a trechneque I
picked up from a pro:

"I have a few tricks that always tend to work on vocals. 
1. I always use delay instead of reverb. Somewhere around 300ms with no feedback (repeats).  Dial in the right tempo and tuck it under so it's barely audible.  Thats a great trick for keeping the vocal up front but still giving it some depth.

2. There's a preset on the Eventide H3000 called MicroPitchShift.  It's a stereo effect that basically thickens up the vocal track.  You can recreate it with plugins.
I tend to use Echoboy or Soundblender to achieve this effect when mixing in the box.  Try this:  stereo delay 12ms on the Left, 24ms on the right. Then pitch shift +8cents on the left and -8 cents on the right. "

I just think it would sound awewsome if you tried it out.

Denis

Cool song. Nice lyrics, good melody, I really like the way you introduce each layer, keeps it really interesting. Well produced with good attention to detail. The solo around 2:30 is cool but a bit messy, it sort of seems to fit with the theme of the song but it's a bit distracting. Still, great work.