Don't Come Home

Finally. For the first time in a while, I've managed to start writing and finish a song in about a week. I have a lot of unfinished songs that probably won't get finished :/. If I don't get very far with a song it's usually a sign it's not very good I think.

I tried to upload it as "Don't Come Home". Apparently I already have a song with the name "Don't Come Home". I obviously don't .



Verse 1
I want so much to make this work
But you've got to help me
If you don't give it what you've got
Might as well forget me now
You had the chance to set things straight
But no you chose to hide from them
If you'd just tell them what you thought
We could be away from here


Chorus
You take your chances
And you risk it all
For one last kiss you gave to me
Was it worth it after all

You say you love me
But I'm not sure
No, after all this time I'd wish you'd stay there
So don't come home


Verse 2
You leave a note outside your door
You can't bear to see me
Crying, hopeless, left behind
Thinking of the past
But I won't think about the ways
That you're moving forwards
Cus I don't care any more
And it's not on my mind


Chorus
You take your chances
And you risk it all
For one last kiss you gave to me
Was it worth it after all

You say you love me
But I'm not sure
No, after all this time I'd wish you'd stay there
So don't come home


Bridge
You take your chances
And you risk it all
For one last kiss you gave to me
Was it worth it after all

You say you love me
But I'm not sure
No, after all this time I'd wish you'd stay there
So don't come home


Chorus
You take your chances
And you risk it all
For one last kiss you gave to me
Was it worth it after all

You say you love me
But I'm not sure
No, after all this time I'd wish you'd stay there
So don't come home

When uploading a song, you can't use apostraphes and other "strange" symbols...
I'm not sure how you composed this but, it sounds very midi-fied... I'm sure it took a lot of work to do
but the overall sound sounds very plastic... it's got a rather nice melody, mixed rather well, just not into that particular sound.... Can you replace the midi with real instruments..?  your vox would work well with some acoustic guitar strumming...

Thanks for the reply.

It was just the ' in Don't then? Oh well. I'll remember that for next time, thanks .

Yeah I made the score in Sibelius, transferred it to FL Studio so I could use soundfonts to try and make it sound more real. But yeah it's based around the MIDI file exported from Sibelius. I'm getting a new acosutic guitar today (hopefully), so I'm gonna record a proper version after that . I decided not to record with my old guitar because it wouldn't have sounded too good. Not sure how I'm going to get real drums though lol.

I hope no one minds me bumping this 

I would love a few more views on this(all returned with a review on your latest )

Your voice sounds pretty nice on this, bu I agree with whoever the guitar sounds a bit too 'fake'. I like it, though.

It will sound awesome with a real guitar, the midi sound kinda takes away from the potential of the tune