A song Patrick wrote after seeing a friend go through a bad relationship

Look in my eyes
And tell me what you see
The broken heart of terror
Lives within me
I can not hide it
The pains to much to take
Help me i am innocent

Are you even listening
I'm crying and I'm dying
I bet my soul you don't even care
you don't even care

No more lies
They cause my ears to bleed
I'm dying on the inside
And you aren't there for me
Big surprise
Your never there for me  
Even in my darkest hour

Seeking self destruction
I lye awake in wonder
Is it worth living anymore?

(solo)

The End

whoops, lost my comment.... like the mood a lot and the piece... don't like the guitar at the end, perhaps it's the mix.... the vocals could use a bit as well, a better mix?  but overall good vibe!


Hai Ke Yi!

I lost my original comment to this aswell. Bandamp is being a bit temporamental.
 Anyway, this has alot of potential. Love the dark piano arpeggios, and the general atmosphere of the song. You could break out abit with you're vocalsthough, they sound a bit constrained. The guitar comes in to suddenly and doesn't suit the song imo. You could try building it up gradually
 But this looks like you're first song on Bandamp, and for that, its excellent.

Hope to hear more soon

Ian

Simple sounding, ok song.  Nothing special to my ears, but that could change with a bit of additional instrumentation (not the guitar, which I don't think does the song justice at all!).
The recording itself is alright, just a little muted.
There's promise there for sure.  But a bit more development in terms of dynamics etc needed here.

First song!!!
welcome to the amp ..........
A bit of a meander ......... like its wandering around a lot .......... lost.
but for a first upload this is great!!!!!
well done............
I see this in the Battle so I vote  50%

if you wonder where I get the figure 50% from ........... there is a guide to rating songs at the bottom of the page


Splash

Welcome!

I like how the mood of the lyrics go well with the piano play. Guitar at the end would be good, except, as SirBorris said, for the fact that it comes up so all of a sudden. Concept is good. Just some work needed. I agree with Swordfish's point of view too.

Very nice work, in general. I'll keep my vote secret! :P

I really enjoyed this one. all of it comes together well, and the lyrics actually work. Nice one!

Love the style here.  The other posters have said it but the vocals could use some mixing.  Just a little more highs and some reverb and they should sound a lot better.  My old audio professor used to say, "I old met one singer in my life that I didn't had to add a little reverb the the mix"  So if it sounds plain, try reverb before anything else.

quote=Thebrokenyouth :
My old audio professor used to say, "I old met one singer in my life that I didn't had to add a little reverb the the mix"
He must have been really old, forgot his teeth maybe or too much sherry ? 

XDeepSecretsX : Welcome to the Amp.
Nice song , vocal is 'muffled' , piano could be crisper.
It does comprise of a piano and a vocal for a long bit and piano and screeching guitar for a short bit !
Which might be all right if the vocal had more dynamics (and the guitar less !)
You sing following the melody of the piano which is also all right......but I think it would sound better if the vocal were to have it's own say !!