I was messing around the other day and threw this one together. It's not finished, but I figured what the hell, I gotta put something up.

Well.......sounds like a loop to me....short
go fer creating a 2 - 3 minute creation
Swordfish

Sounds cool to me....
Industrial sounding and quite dark...
I would deliver the sounds a bit more spread out to where you can get to a better built towards the end..
Good listen though ,short but good!

check out eftos
for more............inspiration down this line..........
http://eftos.bandamp.com/music.html
haha

the fish

Thanks, I know its not much, and needs serious polish.. I plan on trying to figure some way of making more acceptible..

Don't be discouraged we all have to start from somewhere,and as far as I can tell your heading on the right way...
Listen to as much as you can and learn what you can but always keep space for your creativity...I think you said you have acid..Well do some youtube tutorial searches and see what you can get from those..Also Acid planet is a cool site if you have an acid purchase receipt(I think) you can mingle with other acid users...The point is keep at it and don't be scared to experiment no matter who thinks what about your music....

Some pointers from me would be
-Don't through all you have all at once
-Play with panning to give it stereo feel
-Play with the eq to find sound pockets between each sound
-Add efx to the sounds to create new ones...
Anyways keep at it your fine!

wow nice I really dug the violin track that came in toward the end.
Maybe bring in the tracks slower and not some much all at once.
keep working on it!

Very.... ephemeral.  This could be a good opening - where's the rest?

I realize the more I listen to it it is actually quite chaotic.. But I am trying to balance it out and kinda give a smoother transition.. balance out the sounds and such..
I apprecitate the tips and comments. Thank you.

Chaos can be good at times!  It's dark and moody and like said before, would like to be built up to it instead of slammed into it.... good stuff!!

Hai Ke Yi!

This is the best song I've ever heard in my life.
I wasn't sure at first, but upon 2nd listen....yep, best song ever.
You will win a grammy with this masterpiece. If you don't, there is no justice in this world.

Yeah, yeah, you know I'm kidding. Just wanted to drop in and let you know I'm still checking out your stuff. Upload some more!

having so much art talent music should be a nobrainer  for you. In fact the best music comes not from complex thoughts but rather spur of the moment and letting go. you know how to do it. I've heard you sing. This is just you shedding your skin. Dig some more

I'll tell you what... digital music is pretty tricky  - gets you sucked in so easily.. stack a bunch of sounds and it's like WOOWWW... I definately get this sensation from your track here. Overwhelming heavy sound... Yeah, how to continue? What to do next??

It sounds great, but that's just the start. Seems mr. sword knows you in person? And you can Sing, no less?? Hahaha well in that case Im Certainly looking forward to full featured products!