Smiley Smile/Motown-ish song.

Maybe if the vocals were sung an octave higher... and the music was professionally recorded it would be fun for me to listen to.  The vocals to me sound like speaking rather than singing... I want to hear singing with nice memorable refreshing melodies.  Background vocals were nice.

I wouldn't change the vox key, just raise it in the mix.

Sort of 70's sound, hmmm quite interesting.

I feel it should build up and then hit a sort of rock rhythm, with the vox then going up in key. Hey that's just me though.

Blue skies, Lovely

Denis