This was meant to be the first finished product of Arachnid but I fucked up the chorus. I lead into it, but not out of it so the chorus is abruptly back into the verses.

So because of this I didn't zoom in and set the beg. chorus chord strikes with end verse chord strikes. So that will seem muddy.

Other than that I am happy with:
Verse123 Lead Left
Verse1 Lead/Rhy Right
Verse123 RhyFig

Chorus Hybrid Picking

Chorus&Verse123 Vocals
Chorus&Verse Lyrics

Everything except the hiss and the right. I didn't sing loud enough for my mic to eliminate it.
The ight lead sounded much better on other tracks. I dunno.

Lyrics
(Five opening notes)
There is a blind man on the corner
Screaming that hes not insane
He sees the world in rhythm and beat
Hes the man that I wanna be
Says break right through the web to safety
Theres no reasont o be caught int he dark with me

I am the light in the darkness
look to me and you'll burn your eyes
but I will, free you from the darkness
And the arachnids terrible web of lies
I am the fire in the darkness
Look to me

You've got the shacklets on your arms
The devils wily charms
You are so enslaved
I'd love you see you brave
The world through the darkness
and the web
The spiders poisons pain will ebb
Do not be alojne

I am the light in the darkness
look to me and you'll burn your eyes
but I will, free you from the darkness
And the arachnid's terrible web of lies
I am the fire in the darkness
Look to me

You'll never gues what the blind man told me,
Said he saw a puddle of blood at your feet.
I know that you cut open your veins
Try to cut the spiders out
Thats insane
Just come to the light
Fire in the darkness

(Outro lead)

This reminds me a lot of the songs my roomate used to record.

It needs work but there's the workings of a fine song in there. You definitely need to work on singing a bit more in key...you go in and out a lot. The chorus kind of punches you in the face a bit.

Still work to be done but getting a lot closer.I'm not sure about the distorted part with the higher pitch voice...Keep in on the low side in flows well like that...try doing other chords for the chorus to ad color...Good ideas!!!!

The higher vox could work with Drums and elecric distorted guitar, Denis

scratch away the attitude and i think there is a singer/songwriter here................
let your voice deliver this song with the melody pointed at by the guitar
this is great experiment
well recorded with flowing lyric
concentrate on your quiet voice it could be beautiful ......... if you push it away from talking into singing 'u r so enslaved'

k

the fish

I don't know how. Hell I don't even know if I am in key or what key I am singng in. I can't twist the knobs on my throat!

I added a C7 into the chorus. Ah, thanks though.

The chrous is my favorite part. The chorus guitar and vocals is what the whole song was really borne from, trying to figure out how I wanted to do the verses.

Stop calling me a teenage girl, lol.
Uh what?

What do you mean? Do you mean that the way I sing that line is bad? or the the way I sing that is right?

I can't help but feel a kindred spirit between
jagger, sid viscious and jim morrison....

like I said, thanks for picking three famous artists who couldn't sing, hahaha

Don't really like the higher pitched vocals part.

I think in the verses the vocals could be more confident and a little more powerful.

Guitar is played and composed well.

Good Job, but keep at it.

Thank you very much about the guitar comment. It was a challenge for me to play three diffent style of guitar parts and have them work togather instead of against each other.


I really apprecate that thought. It makes me want to revisit this experiment and see if I can do some pitch mathcing before hand and sing a little closer to the melody.

Or maybe add a thumping bass.

I dunno. Four guitar parts might be too much for me, lol