I have about 15 songs that I am messing about with at the moment and can't seem to finish (adult ADHD!) Eventually I got gatvol (fed up) and just recorded a half finished song with just guitar and vocal. Its all very shaky, some notes missed and unsure of the lyrics but I need feedback!

The guitar sounds pretty.  I would bring the vocals back into the mix a little more..they seem a little up front for my liking.  The guitar strumming just before 2:00 seems a bit weak.  Your vocals are pretty good...maybe I'd like to hear a little more variety in your intonation. 

Hmmm.....I like the music and your vocals seem fine. Seems all to mix a bit much tho....If you went harsher on the vocals just a bit it would give a more emotional feel;  at the same time it will give a great contrast. I would leave the music relatively the same. Just beef it up around 1:45-2:00

Try taking a look at either Stained or Pearl Jam performing Black.

Just an idea: around the 1:45 mark, change the melody a bit....kick it up a notch...and intensify the vocals right to the end.

Nice work here....keep it up man.
(can you post the lyrics here?)
thx

-Mark

Thanks a lot guys for the positive commentary and suggestions. Only problem is if I could sing like Eddie Vedder or Aaron Lewis I'd have a whole different kettle of fish!!    My vocal range is pretty limited but I haven't done much singing before (except a mumble to accompany guitar). I'm hoping as I practice confidence will come and I'll be able to belt it out a bit more. Cheers.

as you say yourself, keep on going, get more experience and confidence, u have a nice voice and i like the melody too, it will become great

Thanks a lot man. When I listen to the quality of performance and recording on this site I know I should develop more before I post but we all need a little encouragement now and then eh! 

I must quote you a few times from this thread, and that with one answer to all quotes.....Bollocks!
- Adult ADHD .... Bollocks , smoke more Durban Poison and just get into it!
- My vocal range is pretty limited bla bla bla ....Bollocks, you have an excellent voice, you just need to use it more often, know thy self, and what thy sounds like.
- When I listen to the quality of performance and recording on this site I know I should develop more before I post.............Absolutely and completely bollocks! You haven't listened very well then!!!  
This song of yours is really well performed, shaky maybe as you say, but really nice just the same, I really like the melody in your voice, and certainly where it 'could' go.
Hey! it's all about the 'potential', and this is brimming! 

Well said dude 

Durban Poison isn't so easy to come by in this part of the world! Been getting some pretty cotton woolish sh1t but hey....I'm trying to stay clean man 

thanks for the comments, I'm working on it!!

Vocals sound great. You have a great singing voice....Reminds me a bit of my brother who is also on here..(Shinaube). Really good range.. I was hoping to hear a high part to see just how much range you have.  Its a nice quiet song. It actually sounds really good with just the guitar, there isn't too much noise, so it really brings focus to the vocals.  Great work

thanks a lot!! I'll have to put my tight leathers on to reach any higher  

Sounds great!!!!Very nice in feel.Some recording hiss and noise seems to add a bit of distraction to the track.In general a good track and a good effort.Yeah stay clean!!!Its a better choice...I guarantee it!