I posted the lyrics to this tune months ago and got a good reception. When I went to record it I found that the song was weak. I am looking for ideas to improve this piece as I am fond of the lyrics and the general idea. Thanks!

I really like the guitar sound..bright and crisp.  I liked the idea of the harmonies...they sounded a little off key in places - but I especially like the effect you put on them.  I actually wouldn't add too much more to this...maybe some light percussion if you wanted (like a soft tambourine or shaker etc), or something like a violin?

The tempo changes were nice - they changed the urgency of the song...maybe a little more passion in the voice....sounds like you're singing a little lower than your natural register? - maybe bring the whole thing up a key or two?

Suggestions aside, I like this in its simplicity...and the lyrics are quite nice. 

u write fine songs ................... no doubt
this is very good ...................im listening to it in the amp so it rolls over a few times
nice bass
Its a kinda talk through.................
BUT i can hear your singing voice shining in the background doing the harmony!!!!!
Lovely..........
like the slow down..................it shows your 'top' voice again............

this is a great track.................
u understand and feel harmony
dont be afraid of what your voice can do
man u can sing..................in tune!!!!!!! high and low........

when u sing u sing really well
love it.........enjoyed it big smile........keep workin them vocal harmonies they are very nice

guitar great and well recorded

sounds live........but isn't   haha

I Really like this song..........listed 2 at least 5 times at least...haha
big vote

Fish    

The change about 1:00, 2:00, and 3:00 minutes in the song should be thicker in rhythm to showcase it... maybe even some distorted guitar.  Then back to acoustic only.  There's something workable here... it just needs to be filled up a bit and a polished recording.  The overall effect with those changes would come out sounding something similat to a Jethro Tull song (mixed with Phish-style actually)... very cool!

Thanks for the feedback so far...

A Shaker is a pretty good idea for this...seems a pretty good (and easy!) way to add some simple percussive sounds.

Thanks for the feedback so far, keep it coming anyone else!

This has a really nice beat. Only thing I can suggest is add electric guitar at a few places, but still I love this song!
Excellent job!