I woke up pissed off this morning and I came out with that!
It's just me messing around but posting it is part of the process to make me feel better!

Great bit of channeling the energy you got when you woke up!!

This is what songwriting is all about.

But it's not finished, need some ace drums, driving bass and definatly raise the vox.

And a guitar solo, I could see Marino doing a collab on this?

Keep em comin

Denis

Holy mother of god; I was not expecting that.  Quite a jump from your acoustic stuff!

Firstly, that is a badass riff; I agree with Denis about channeling the emotion.  This is actually a pretty cool song.  Obviously it needs some work, but it's a good concept.

I'd like to see this developed into something a bit more fleshed out with attention paid to the recording.

I'd like to hear a more finished version, even if it's just vocals and guitar.  Has potential to be brutally raw!

thanks a lot
I have to say it was never supposed to be a song more of a therapeutic/stress relieve thing but I might take your advise and work on it
so if anyone is up for collab on that one let me know because as usual I cannot program drums etc...

Something was festering upon my mind when I first heard this song, but now I figured it out.... 1) Is this sung in English (some or all?),... and fits in the genre of Suicidal Tendencies ("Join the Army" days)...

the"chorus" and bridge are in English but the verses are in French

ohhh i hope you get p'd off more often!..lol...i love anger me! this is really good...i dont blame you for posting it as it is..its got all the feelings it needs to have..xxxxx go and rest now..you need it...lol..xxxx

This is pretty rocking.I might be interested on developing this with ya!!!!(If no one has already taken to it).Sounds like an awesome metal track.Love the guitar riff....

it's there for the taking Antony
I never thought you would rate this! I'm honored
let me know how you want to do it if you can find the time

Parisian Punk ! Excellent!

You tell em Vince......

I like the French better than the English to be honest, has more guts !    The English sounds ponsy  in comparison !!! 
The guitar says the rest. As Denis said 'a nice bit of channelling'

I heard somewhere that French is supposed to be the best language for rap! The "flow" is right apparently
I don't know but it felt OK to sing this in French

yes  you deff sound pissed off...Dont know what your saying or singing...but yeah, I wouldnt mess with you!!! 

Flyer

will rate

here's a rough translation of the French part

verse 1

too easy to hide your face
to stay stuck in the dirt
on your knees you're broken by their menaces
like a pet you lay down at your place

verse 2

rattata !!! the sound of machine guns
but you hide from the battle
the enemy is right at your door
but you hide and play dead

chorus

the shame shine on your face
be scared you'll soon be dead

break

you think it will just go away
but I'm here to make you pay

Give me a bit and Ill work on it...This is pretty good!!!
Really     !!!