A religious hip-hop(r&b?)piece.
Thanks JimK for the intro,outro,lyrics,and vox.
I think it's freaking amazing!
Now all you need to do is sit back,turn up your speakers,and relax.

when I woke up this morning yo,I'd lost everything
All of my plans and my hopes and dreams
Laying in ruin was my material wealth
I felt so bad, I'd even lost my health
No friends or family to help me through
I was so alone, I didn't know what to do

Then the alarm clock sounded it was just a dream
I dropped to my knees and I praised the king
I've taken for granted all the things in my life
Cause so many  lives are filled with pain and strife

I thank the lord for guiding me with his light
I thank my mom for raising me right
I thank my dad for the food I was fed
And nice warm place to lay my head.

I'm not into hip hop...but this is sounding nice....the vocals are a bit hard for me to hear..they seem in the back a bit.....

nice work

Flyer

Will Rate

well neither am I.
well the vocals are an easy fix.
but thanks man glad you enjoyed :]

well this is pretty ... interesting... a religious hip hop. It really has the feel and sound it should have, though the vocals do at some points sink away a little (flat compression could solve this) - the chorus/doubler effect of the vocals is great.

Lyrics are at that, also very good (given the genre). Only thing is, it's short, else a slightly polished version of this song may be very interesting to a larger audience. Well done!

oh this is different... i think its awsome! your a hip hop fan i see.? this is very professionaly done,,..well i have a thumbs up from 3 here.. well done.. great composition...xxxxx will rate

Oh, so i see you're back on the hip hop Jim    I think you sound really good here, i like how the vox is mixed.  The only thing is that there are some timming issues, that i'm sure you could fix.  The drums are good also, MM.  I'm not a big fan of those strings but they do the job.  I'd love to hear a more "sampled" sound tho... more like old school hip hop... but of course that's a matter of taste.

Good job, overall.

Haha this is really good, jim is too cool with this stuff! decent production vox could be higher but the vocals are recorded alright, maybe there's issues if the volume on them is raised higher?

Sounds great...and loud man! how did you get it so loud?nice strings.

thanks you guys for the feedback :]
working on it a bit now!

but again,thank you for your support :]
Chy

see what happens when my internet dies for 3 days?  MM posts a song.  fliiiiip...

Sorry I didn't get to this sooner    DSL company did some maintanance and the whole thing went down for a lot longer than planned!  jackers.

This is pretty, neat   I'm not profusely into hip-hop, but I respect this.  I'm going to have to protest aetheris' comment about not liking the strings.  heck.  i didn't think they were that bad.  I liked them.

i agree about it being longer... I'd like to have it push forward into another "movement", if you will.  But I can't say too much, as my old Actually song was only 1:46 i think.  you've got me beat, with that intro/outro added to the song!

i'm not sure what to suggest to help the things I've pointed out... I'll have to get back to you on that one.

 

TLS

thanks TLS :]
and -whispers-hahaha your internet went away! lol jk.

well if Jim is willing I guess we could do another part.

and again thank you ^_^

Real good Guys.I think this turn out awesome!It really captured the vibe of a rap song!Honestly great job!

If the beat was a little fuller and the lyrics were a little more behind, it isn't inconcievable that I'd hear this at the local hole.

Marino thanks!I tried and that's all I can say!(though I'm jim could say more lol..I don't even get what I said so no worries)

dark:thanks,but I would want rap to be played at any place where I would want to go so I guess no worries,eh?

Lovin this - bit of almost old-school hip-hop here.  Also think your use of strings works really well.  Comments on mixing have already been said.
Only change I'd make is at the end.  The needle/scratch effect you use to transition from the first part into the song at the beginning works excellently I think, but something about the last one makes it feel detached from the song.  Maybe different chords or...?  Its late so I cant crank my speakers up but i'll have another listen tomorrow and let you know.
Diggin the hip-hop tho!
Kobeshi