Hi all!

After taking into account your opinions, me and James have finalised our track. We are happy with the feel and sound on this version. Following constructive criticism from bandamp members we have:

- increased the presence of the main vocals in the mix
- redone the bridge
- given the distorted guitars a little more bottom end 'grunt' without overpowering them

Please give feedback

Thanks

Dave & James

> PS here are James lyrics again:

Another drunk escapade but you're not having fun
Have i said something stupid?
Would you rather move on to the next bar
Or the next guy thats caught your eye
As you stare out the window, to the taxi rank

You seem distracted, checking the calls on your phone
You're putting walls up now with a distance thats left me alone
Although im not, thats how it feels right now
As I feel you slipping through my fingers
Im calling time, im calling time.

As the night takes its toll
My suspicious unfold
You claim you're under the weather girl as I
Watch you down another vodka and coke
A few lines and a toke
Am I not getting through to you?

You seem distracted, checking the calls on your phone
You're putting walls up now with a distance thats left me alone
Although im not, thats how it feels right now
As I feel you slipping through my fingers...

And I'm left calling time
Lets end our misery
Its all that I can do
what the hell is wrong with you?

You've been like a stranger
You're closing off doors that you might just regret
Im not sure its the way that you wanted things to be
But I'm calling time


And I'm left calling time
Lets end our misery
Its all that I can do
What the hell is wrong with me?

And I'm left calling time
Lets end on misery
Its all that I can do
What the hell is wrong with me and you?

Hmmm...very nice!  I have opinions but I caught what you said about going for a certain sound.  The guitar just seems a bit too clean?  Oh well, the song is very well constructed.  Sounds good, man! By the way, whos doing what in here?

The main thing dave is your Happy with this, i'm glad you have finalised the cut.

For what it's worth, I can hear the vox much beter in this mix.

Be Lucky

Denis

And I must say, I still think it was fine before... I think it worked well with the mood of the song, and although you did bring the vox out a bit more, I liked it before, a bit muddled in the mix, as is your voice when hopping from bar to bar with a "girlfriend" who is only partly paying attention to ya... This really is pretty good.. And I think the quality is excellent... it is radio ready... And I thin kit would be received well in todays market..

               JimK

Very clean mix(maybe slightly too clean in some places) but very well done
I think your music have a large audience ready to take it so get out there and rendez vous at the Kerang best new comers award next years!
Good luck

I think its brilliant that you take such care with perfecting your sound. im sure it'll pay off.
  great song

Ian

thanks for the comments all. looking forward to making more music!

You know, I always listen too your music and say to myself "This is way to punky" but it never really came to me that you're from the country that most heavily influenced punk. I mean, you're surrounded by black metal nations.

Makes me wondour, when I plug in my strat if everyone from britian thinks I am just a seattle grunge wanna-bee?

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Both you and james commented on my song titled (IGNORE!) with a discription of DON'T LISTEN please. I wanted to find a suitable song to explain my frustraition to you on. And I clicked on this one. And I was like "I've heard this before" so I had to click from the begining to find out where I heard it.

Sadly enough, I found the song (acting different). This made me lol really hard because I then wanted to hear the "middle version" to see the changes you made. When I clicked it, it said the title of the first. I was like WASTE OF TIME. haha.

Yeah I wrote off these two songs because they were repeats, but I should have listened to them. The sound really grew and I can hear that you put alot into them. So sorry for that mate, good news though! I like it, as much as a guy like me can like punk. :D:D:D  :P  Much love. I'll give a better comment some other time.

my honest opinion:
drums are bit flat, need more action (midi?)
vocals sound that they are sung bit under pressure (eq issue) and very english, hehe
sound of the distorted guitar is great
sound of the guitar in the bridge is bit crappy and I heard some strings out of tune anyway
at this point some keys would work well
lyrics are well done, same the melody
I think you are on the right way to find a good sound
And I can really imagine you performing this on stage..
All in all a good song, nice to hear

as a whole song and coming from someone who listens to music without being too technical..i love it.. to me its bang on...i am amazed at your talent.. great work....xxxxxxxwilll rate