A song that started as an instrumental and that I managed to finish thanks for an inspired impro by Jimtheatman
Thanks again Jim

Wow - first song of yours i've listened to and you have a great voice!  Not to mention a great guitar sound to support it.  Being a guitar guy myself, i would maybe bring the guitar fowards in the mix a tinnnyyyyy bit.  Just a fraction.  90% of the time its fine but in a few places the vocals just seemed to drown the guitar a little bit.  But thats me being picky on an otherwise great song!  Could see myself listening to this on the beach - gonna download and see if it passes the 'beach chill test'!!
will rate
kobeshi

I think the mix is spot on personally.

This is right up my street, I wouldn't want you to change a thing with this song.

It has so much identity Great you got impro from Jim.

Great songwritting

Well done.

High vote

Denis

What another beautiful song.
You have a beautiful voice, your accent is really cool, very clever lyrics and really beautiful guitar work.
Your recording is sooo much better than your first up-loads.

I am officially a fan! 

Beautiful song!
Some really good chord changes.Melody is awesome.Love the texture and construction of the song.The bridge sounded a bit struggled on the vocal dept towards the beginning of it, but it fell right into place as it progressed!
Awesome job!

hi marks!

It funny how you say the mix sound ok this time because when I play the song live I never manage to get it right!
The guitar always feel too behind and I'm force to play it harder with disastrous consequences!
I agree with Marino when he says the start of the chorus feels a bit struggled
this song was recorded months ago (I had problem with the uploading part!) and then I wasn't very confident with my singing
I've work a lot a lot on my vocals lately and recording to come should hopefully show it
Thank you for the comments guys

The song is up in the battle this month if it has been fixed?
So please do vote
Thanks

I hate to be in disagreement with the rest of the listening audience: not about the quality of the song and your playing skills - that is first rate!

No, I think you need other musicians in this with you: Bass, drums, a little keyboard. And this would allow you to play a little less, and more expressively. You have a sensitive touch, but are trying to do a little too much. Not that the song doesn't require a full sounding set up, it really does. I do understand why you work the guitar so much - it sounds good and, of course, you can. I still give high ratings for this one, the song just wants more people in there with you.

love the chords ... very good guitar playing .. and your voice fits this perfectly .  the recording quality if very clean and full.. This is very tasty stuff.  I would love to solo on guitar over those chords ... gotta lotta color to choose from ... gets real high vote
greg

i am definatly voting for this song.it has a clean sound to it.your voice is really good.you know how to sing.x

Well, I dont know what happened to the original post, so here goes what I said:


     I am honored to be an inspiration to anyone, especially one as talented as you. This is Fantastic, and really is great to see how you have filled this song out, from such a simple improv. The lyrics tell a great story, and make me really feel like I'm watching the song unfold.

                 Humbly Yours
                          JimK

WOW you have awsome acoustic skills man awsome voice and a cool theme
look forward to hearing more like this!