This is a collaboration between myself - Rock Shore (lyrics)and Rob McMann (music).

I just thought I'd give it a go myself.

All comments welcome, Good or Bad!

Take care

really very nice. lyrics and all. its quite refreshing to hear someones vocals that arent drowned in reverb, at some points it sounds as if the vox are peaking a little too loudly above the music.
 
 very profesional song, good collab

Ian

sounds great...  you have a nice voice and the
talent to boot!

Blessings,

Dan - Blueyes

thanks dan.

take care,

you sound lovely.I am glad to say all good coming from me!...brilliant!..high rated..xxxxxxxx  your very talented..x on key and good vibrato..xxx

Thanks for that, it's still a bit rough. I want to re-record it now I think I know how to use the studio I bought a bit better.
Not to good at using electronics lol.

I love your stuff Paganscradle. I enjoyed listening ver much

Take care,

Rock

this is nice live..............
sounds like i'm in the room
with grandmas piano.........

the fish

Very nice piece, bring your vocal forwards or recorded it higher so you can give your self more 'presence' , the 'music' got me going to start with , but the continuous rolling piano got in the way after a while.
It should have stopped looping and 'become something' because your vocal is.....something.....already!
Yes! Do it again! 

Great advice, thank you. will repost once i've re-recorded.