Day before school starts, and I figured I'd use my last day of summer to write a new song.

I think I should have spent more time on this and come up with a better melody for the verse, but oh well.

Lyrics:
You gotta come to your senses
To get a little respect
Cause nobody listens
To all the hypocrites
So even if you’re right
Singing your song
They’ll still accuse you
Of being wrong
Nobody likes an extremist
They don’t like the fight
maybe if they’d listen
We’d make it all right

You’re so cool
But boring
They’re all fools
And snoring
You’re so extreme
You must be wrong
They’re so serene
It’s what they want
You think so clear
But you’re crazy
They’re gripped by fear
And lazy
If every mind is a battleground
Your mind must be world war one

Set me free
Set me free
Set me free

Your mental jewelry
Is paid for by god
it’s a little rusty
But that’s what you want
They’re twisted and hopeless
So you’re building a bomb
You’re guilty yet shameless
But you’re never wrong

You’re so cool
But boring
They’re all fools
And snoring
You’re so extreme
You must be wrong
They’re so serene
It’s what they want
You think so clear
But you’re crazy
They’re gripped by fear
And lazy
If every mind is a battleground
Your mind must be world war one

Good tune!
Really good witting skills!
Your sound has become heavier.The drums are a bit buried!
This another good song from you.
Good luck with school and keep in touch!

Agree with Marino about the drums... too far back in the mix.

But the clarity of all other instruments and vocals is excellent.
Vocals are a little out at times, but the musical style lets you get away with it (to a degree!! )

Instrumentation is good, with decent tones from the guitars

Nice simple construction that works well.

Good song.. I liked it.

i bet ur winning all the battle of the bands at school? This is good stuff. mix issues have already been mentioned but i dont think there too severe, in a live gig the drums would be plenty loud enough.

keep at it, i think ur writing skills are gettin better

Ian

this has a really nice touch. cant help but I like it anyway....

bass makes it very dark

catchy chorus

Yeah, your production techniques have dramatically improved.

Personally I would focus on your vocals, they are getting better all the time, this is what most listeners are listening to.

Agree with Marino's comments, never the less as I've said great impovement. Keep it up!!

Will rate.

Denis