This one took me a long time to do, I'm so glad it's done! haha. This one's pretty personal, so I'll leave it to your imaginations. I hope you enjoy it.

Let me see...
Well, drums sound pretty fake for me. Is like you were using an electronic drums pack. Try using Acoustica Beatcraft.
The intro sounds a lot like Nirvana.
The guitar playing sounds a bit rough at some times, but it has a lot of feeling so that's good.
May be is a bit long and flat... like always the same. Is more like a noodle.
But overall is a nice tune. May be some clear variations and that's it!

          > Iszil

sweet

Sounds good, but the drums do sound very fake. Other than that, great job. 

Thanks Iszil, I tried Acoustica and it's great.

Good idea song!Like Iz said work the drums.The mix is pretty good!!!

Like the variation

The vocals sound like they're in the wrong register for you. Would it be possible to sing lower or higher?

I'd say vocal isn't the best one but suits the mood of the song. Drums need to improve either with live drummer or better drumming program. Assuming this is home recorded song. Voice reminds me Jim Morrison a bit
Pretty interesting theme.