Out and out old school heavy british rock! Needs work so GIVE ME IDEAS!! (please!)

Some really nice thrashing about.  I enjoyed this!

Some lyrics wouldn't hurt. Otherwise do some more guitar work....lead riffs. Keep practicing. Your timing seems off in places. And it needs a bridge, a turn, a ....something.

I know that all of my songs lack a certain something.... mainly lyrics. i don't know how to write lyrics and i can't sing all too well but i'll be willing to give it a try if i can write some form of words for it.  thanks for the words of encouragement guys,
joey 

i like the palm muting bits done at about the 30 seconds and 1 minute marks.

i'd try combining palm muting tricks and a sort of musical "build" back up to the ending.  i'd also throw the main guitar up a few notes higher to give it emphasis... a climax of some sort.  maybe you could overlay the higher notes on top of the existing ending part.  i'd be careful not to get too complex though, else the melodies start to conflict and it turns into just noise   to avoid that, maybe just turn these higher notes that i'm talking about into a harmony to the ones that are already there.

good work though!

not bad but more guitar solos in there would be awesome. sounds foo fighterish...

Theres no way is this the best song! But thanks   I think the best songs tittle belong to “Bathed in Beauty” by Blackdog and  "Fall out" by Chauvette. Trust me and give em' a listen.