I re-wrote my old song Avenger as a hardcore rock song. The only thing retained from the original is the oboe line, which is played by the lead guitar during the chorus.

Lyrics:
In spite of what I say
I say it every day
I can’t get my way
I spite of what I sing
You just can’t seem to bring
Yourself to me

Why Can’t you listen
Can’t you listen to me
Why Can’t it happen
Can it happen to me?

In spite of what I want
I can’t get any thoughts
You’re sitting next to me
In spite of how I look
I Get it out a book
You won’t listen

Why Can’t you listen
Can’t you listen to me
Why Can’t it happen
Can it happen to me?


No matter how we talk
You’ll never walk my way
You’re like some brick wall
You’re not a thing at all
Just like a stone wall
You’re just passive

Can’t you listen
Can’t you listen to me
Why Can’t it happen
Can it happen to me?

I love the Idea on the song.The song is well contructed and arranged , the guitar sound is a bit twangy for my taste but the parts are great!!Awesome Job!!!

I think the song has real identity. The mix needs a little adjusting, think the drums and bass need to come up, it will support your vox better.

I quite like it.

Denis