basically its just a song written by my old metal band Cellar Door we have ceased to be since we dropped our drummer....all the vocals for our 9 track ep were done in the one day so vocals are a little off

The mix is way off when the vocals come in and are just off like you said.

Could be a great metal tune. Just needs mixing and tweaking..

Considering what you said, not bad... maybe, like chauvette wrote, you need a good mixing and an appropriate compression/limiting session.

Some production and less invasive digital effect intervention would be good..

Hey what's wrong with this?

The bass uses no effects and the guitar effects isn't digital either theres a metalzone distortion stompbox and a boss flanger...

its well written, all i can say against it is think of the sounds you're using and the levels the instruments need to be at...good job

This is a good song. It just needs to be refined a little. Maybe some good vocals and effects. Thats all you really need.